Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

THIS LINE GRAPHS PROVIDE THE INFORMATION ABOUT THE CHANGES IN OWNERSIP PERCENTAGE OF ELECTICAL APPLIANCES LIKE WASHING MACHINE, REFRIGERATOR AND VACUUM CLEANER AND, ALSO THE NUMBER OF HOURS THAT HOUSEHOLDS SPENDED TO DO HOUSEWORK IN A COUNTRY FROM 1920 TO 2019. OVER ALL THE REFRIGERATOR WAS INCREASED DRASTICALLY AFTER A DACADE AS COMPARE TO WASHING MACHINE AND VACUUM CLEANER IT GROWN FROM 0 TO ALMOST 100% BY THE GAP OF 60 YEARS.

IN 1920, THE PERCENTAGES OF WASHING MACHINE WAS 40 AND VACUUM CLEANER WAS AT 30% BUT THE REFRIGERATOR WAS AT 0% BECAUSE OF IT THE HOUSEWORKERS SPENT THEIR HIGHEST HOURS IN 1920 WHICH IS 50 HOURS PER WEEK. AFTER TWO DACADE THE PERCENTAGES OF ALL ELECTRICAL APPLIANCES WERE NEAR TO CLOSE WHICH IS 50 OF VACUUM CLEANER, 54 OF REFRIGERATOR AND 60 OF WASHING MACHINE, IT DECREASED THE AMOUNT OF SPENT HOURS IN HOUSEWORK BY 20 HOURS PER WEEK.

ALL APPLIANCES GOT THE HIGHER PERCENTAGES IN 2019 WHICH WAS 75% INWASHING MACHINE AND 95% IN REFRIGERATOR AND VACUUM CLEANER, THIS DECREASED THE AMOUNT OF SPENT HOURS IN HOUSEWORK BY ONLY SPENT 10 HOURS PER WEEK.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify the main relationship: appliance ownership generally rose while housework hours fell. The figures you give for 1920, 1940 and 2019 are broadly consistent with the chart, and the comparison between the three appliances in 1940 is useful. However, the overview is not fully accurate: refrigerators rose from about 2% to 100% by 1980, not from 0% to almost 100% over 60 years, and the vacuum cleaner also reached 100% by 2000. The response would be more complete if it described the middle years, including the refrigerator’s early rapid rise, the washing machine’s slight dip around 1980, and the plateau in housework hours from 1980 to 2000. Clarify that the final figure is about 11 hours.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by two paragraphs reporting data from different periods. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information, and phrases such as “After two decade” help signal a time shift. However, the progression is somewhat uneven because the middle years are largely skipped, and the final paragraph jumps directly from 1940 to 2019. Some links are mechanical or unclear, particularly “because of it” and “this decreased the amount,” where the relationship between appliance ownership and housework hours is asserted rather than clearly expressed. Use a more systematic chronological comparison and clearer references, such as “As ownership increased, weekly housework time fell.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “percentages,” “electrical appliances,” “housework,” and “per week,” so the topic is generally clear. There are also attempts to describe change with words such as “increased drastically” and “decreased.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “ownership percentage,” “spent to do housework,” and “got the higher percentages.” Spelling errors such as “ownersip,” “electical,” and “daca­de” (decade) are noticeable, while repeated use of “amount” and “percentages” makes the report less precise. Build a small set of accurate trend phrases and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can usually understand the comparisons and time references. However, some sentence structures and verb forms are inaccurate, as in “the refrigerator was increased” and “it grown,” where active forms such as “the proportion owning refrigerators increased” would be appropriate. Subject–verb agreement and plural forms also need attention: “the percentages … was” should be “the percentage … was” or “the percentages … were.” The long opening sentence and the sentence beginning “After two decade” contain awkward clause connections, and capitalising the entire response makes punctuation harder to follow. Practise forming clear comparison sentences, with accurate subjects and verbs, and use normal sentence case.

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