Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

THE LINE GRAPH DEMONSTRATES THE CHANGES IN OWNERSHIP OF ELECTRICAL APPLIANCES AND AMOUNT OF TIME UTILISED IN DOING HOUSEWORK IN HOUSEHOLD IN A COUNTRY BETWEEN 1920 AND 2019. OVERALL, IT IS EVIDENT THAT VACUMM CLEANER WAS MOST FAVOURABLE AS COMPARED TO REFRIGERATOR. WHILE THE MOST AMOUNT SPENT WAS 50 HOURS AND LESS WAS 10 HOURS.

TO COMMENCE WITH, REFRIGETER WAS LESS DEMANDED IN YEAR 1920 BUT LATER ITS GRAPH ROSE TO APPROXIMATELY 100% IN 2000 AND WAS AT SAME LINE OD 100% IN 2019 , IN BETWEEN IT WAS ROSE BY 50 TO 90. VACUMM CLEANER WHICH EXPERIENCED STEADY GROWTH FROM 1920 AT 30% TO 50%, ABOUT 70% AND 90% IN 160 AND 1980 , LATER ROSE TO 100% AND LEFT THE REFRIGERATOR BEHIND IN APPLIANCE UTILISATION. WHEREAS, WASHING MACHINE WAS IN DEMAND BY 40% IN1920 AND IN 1940 AROUND 60% WHICH ROSE BY 10% IN 1960 BUT EXPERIENCED DOWNFALL IN 1980 AND BECOME LESS THAN 70% BUT AGAIN ROSE TO 70% IN 2000 AND LITTLE UPLIFT TO ABPOUT 71% IN 2019.

HOWEVER, THE NUMBER OF HOUR SPENT WAS EXACT 50 HOURS IN 1920 WHICH ULTIMATELY FALL BETWEEN 40 TO 30 HOURS IN 1940. IN 1960, ONLY 20 HOURS WERE BEING UTILISED, IN ADDITION IT FALL AND BECOME MORE AND MORE LESS. AS LESS THAN 20 HOURS WERE IN UTILISATION FOR DOING HOUSEWORK IN BOTH THE YEAR 1980 AND 2000. IN 2019 IT WAS 10 HOURS WHICH SHOWS THAT THE HOURS DECLINED AND THE REASON CAN BE INTRODUCTION OF ELECTRONIC DEVICES , MADE WOMEN FREE SPENDING LONG HOURS FOR HOUSEWORK.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify the broad patterns: appliance ownership generally increased, while housework time declined. Several figures are also reported accurately, including the refrigerator reaching 100% and the vacuum cleaner rising from 30% to 100%. However, the overview is unclear and does not capture the key contrast precisely: refrigerators and vacuum cleaners reached full ownership, whereas washing machines remained lower. Some details are inaccurate or vague: the washing-machine figure in 2019 was about 75%, not 71%, and the housework figure was about 11 hours, not exactly 10. The claim that the vacuum cleaner was “most favourable” is also misleading, since it did not lead throughout. Focus the overview on the main trends and compare the series more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening overview followed by discussion of appliances and then housework. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several years and series are packed into long sentences, as in the vacuum-cleaner and washing-machine discussion. Connectors such as “whereas,” “however,” and “in addition” are sometimes used without a clear logical relationship, and the final explanation about electronic devices shifts from reporting data to speculation. Use shorter, clearly ordered comparisons, and make each paragraph follow a consistent sequence, such as describing the appliance trends before the housework trend.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “ownership,” “steady growth,” “declined,” and “approximately,” so the main trends can generally be understood. However, the range and control are limited, with repeated or unnatural expressions such as “was less demanded,” “most favourable,” and “hours were being utilised.” Several spelling errors—“vacumm,” “refrigereter,” “abpout,” and “od”—also reduce accuracy and can distract the reader. Choose standard chart language and collocations, for example, say that ownership “was low” or “increased,” and that time “was spent on housework.” Proofreading spelling and avoiding awkward phrases would make the description clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and time references, but the range of sentence structures is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “in between it was rose by 50 to 90” has an incorrect verb construction, while “which shows that the hours declined” does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence formation, as in “in household in a country” and “the number of hour spent was exact 50 hours.” These errors sometimes make relationships between figures unclear. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build shorter sentences with a clear subject and verb before adding subordinate clauses.

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