Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The first line graph illustrates the different electrical appliances used during housework while the second line graph gives the percentage of duration spent using them during housework during the period of 1920 to 2019 in one nation.

Overall, the use of vacuum cleaner and refrigerator kept increasing consistently during all the period studied while washing machine witnessed flactuations in their used time. However, we can observe that the amount of hours of housework saw a dramatic decline from 1920 to 2019.

According to the first line graph, the electrical appliance that kept increasing are vacuum cleaner and refrigerator.Households in 1920 did not have refrigerator while 30% of them had a vacuum cleaner. The use of both aplliances kept increasing consistently until it reached their peak of 100%.Though, they both witnessed a remained ownership from 2000 to 2019. While, 40% of houses had a washing machine in 1920,this amount kept increasing until it witnessed a slight drop form 1960 to 198. After that, the share of using washing machine kept increasing until it reached its peak in 2019. (above 70%)

According to the second graph, the time spent of washing clothes,preparing meals and cleaning fell from 50% to 15% in 1980 then it remained stable during the period of 1980 to 2000. After that, it had a slight drop of 5% in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad contrast between rising appliance ownership and falling housework time, and you include several relevant figures. However, some key information is misreported or unclear. The second graph shows hours per week, not a percentage of time spent using appliances, so describing the graphs that way in the introduction and later saying housework fell from “50% to 15%” is inaccurate. Refrigerator ownership was about 2% in 1920, rather than none, and washing-machine ownership dipped from about 70% in 1960 to 65% in 1980—not from 1960 to “198.” The overview also says washing-machine use fluctuated, although ownership changed only modestly. Report the units accurately and compare the main trends more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two graphs. This helps the reader follow the broad division of information. However, progression within the appliance paragraph is uneven, with repeated statements that ownership “kept increasing” and several abrupt or confusing transitions, such as “Though” and “While” beginning sentences without a clear connection. The overview also refers to “use” and “used time,” making it difficult to distinguish ownership from hours of housework. Improve cohesion by grouping the appliance trends into clear comparisons, then describing the housework-hours trend in its own paragraph, using accurate references and fewer repetitive linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “households,” “ownership,” “consistently,” “decline,” and “remained stable.” However, word choice and collocation are often imprecise, sometimes obscuring the data. For example, “percentage of duration spent using them” does not describe the second graph, and “the use of both appliances” should refer to their ownership or household coverage. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “flactuations,” “aplliances,” and “form.” Phrases such as “witnessed a remained ownership” and “slight drop of 5%” are awkward or inaccurate. Build a more precise range for describing proportions and hours, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “until,” and the main message is generally understandable. However, errors in agreement, sentence construction, articles, and punctuation recur. For instance, “the electrical appliance … are” has a singular–plural mismatch, while “washing machine witnessed flactuations in their used time” has unclear agreement and structure. Several sentences run together after full stops, as in “refrigerator.Households” and “100%.Though,” and commas are missing in places. Some clauses beginning “Though” or “While” are incomplete or awkwardly attached. Practise forming complete sentences and checking subject–verb agreement, punctuation, and clause connections.

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