Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts below illustrates the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing home work in households in one nation between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, in early, the used of washing machine was used most commonly, the concept of vacuum cleaner was not a popular and in that time the refrigerator was not discovered. But at the end of this period, the trend of refrigerator and vacuum cleaner is on its peak point while, the trend of washing machine is almost same.

In 1920, the used of washing machine was popular proportion 40 and the trend of vacuum cleaner was proportion 30 in same year. But the trend of vacuum cleaner was increased consistently until 2000, and then this trend remain same. On the other hand, refrigerator increased very rapidly at the end of 1980 and after this trend remain same like vacuum cleaner.

The trend of washing machine was increased or decreased according to the time and at the end of period it proportion roughly 72%.

In contrast, in 1960 the trend of washing machine and vacuum cleaner same 70 percent and trend of refrigerator and vacuum cleaner same in 2000 and then at the end of period remain same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad contrast between appliance ownership rising and housework time falling, and you include some relevant figures, such as washing machines at 40% in 1920 and about 72% by 2019. However, the response only minimally reports the charts: the housework-hours series is not described at all, despite being a major feature. Some claims are inaccurate or unclear: refrigerators were not “not discovered” in 1920, but were owned by about 2% of households, and their rise was rapid mainly before 1980, not “at the end of 1980.” The overview also says washing-machine ownership was “almost same,” although it rose overall and fluctuated. Select the main trends from both charts and compare them accurately to make the summary more complete and grounded in the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, overview and body paragraphs, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In contrast” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is weak: appliance trends are repeated across paragraphs, while the housework chart is omitted, so the information is not organised into a clear account of both visuals. Several links are also confusing or inaccurate, particularly “the trend of refrigerator and vacuum cleaner same in 2000 and then at the end of period remain same,” which does not clearly explain the comparison. Group the main trends logically—for example, rising appliance ownership together, then declining housework hours—and use references that make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “ownership,” “proportion,” “increased consistently” and “rapidly,” so the reader can recognise the topic and intended trends. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “the trend of” and “was popular.” Some word choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “the concept of vacuum cleaner” and “refrigerator was not discovered” do not describe household ownership, while “on its peak point” is an awkward way to report a maximum. Use precise terms for the data, such as “the proportion of households owning,” “reached 100%,” and “levelled off.” This would make the comparisons clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and longer sentences, including contrasts introduced by “But” and “On the other hand.” However, control is inconsistent, and frequent errors sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “The charts below illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “amount of time spend” uses an incorrect verb form. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “in early” and “the used of washing machine was used most commonly.” Some clauses lack clear or complete grammatical structure, as in “at the end of period it proportion roughly 72%.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build comparisons with complete patterns, such as “ownership rose to…” and “the figure remained stable.”

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