Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
both charts shows the changes inownership of electrical appliances and ampunt of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
percentage of households with electrical appliciance in 1920 is very low . the percentage of household is 50%. and in 1960 it is 70% and in 1980 it is again low that is nearly 65%. in 2000 the percentage of households is slightly uper like going to 70%. and at last the percentage of household in 2019 inagain going to uper level like nearly 75%.
the second chart shows the number of hours of housework per week , and per house hold from 1920 to 2019. the percentage om 1929 is going to 50% and then with the years passed pecentages became low like in1960 percentage is 40% and in 1960 it is 20 and 2000 the percentage is 10. aomething
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While the student attempts to describe the trends in both charts, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview or summary of the main features. The data points provided are often inaccurate or confusingly presented (e.g., referring to hours of housework as 'percentages'). The response lacks a clear comparison between the two trends, which is a key requirement of the task. To improve, the student should ensure all data is accurately transcribed and provide a clear, concise summary of the overall trends observed across the period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'the percentage of...'). There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas or contrast the two charts effectively. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences is disjointed. To improve, the student should use a wider variety of linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'consequently' to guide the reader through the information and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on the word 'percentage' and 'households.' There are several spelling errors, such as 'inownership,' 'ampunt,' 'appliciance,' and 'uper.' The student struggles to use precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'declined,' or 'remained stable.' The vocabulary is just about adequate to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. Focusing on learning synonyms for common verbs and nouns related to data description would significantly enhance the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('both charts shows'), incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation errors. The sentence structures are simple and repetitive, with little attempt at complex sentences. There are also instances of incomplete sentences and unclear phrasing, such as 'aomething.' These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To improve, the student should focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that punctuation is used correctly. Practicing the use of complex structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, would also help improve the grammatical range.
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