Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THE CHART TELLS THE INFORMATION ABOUT THE CHNAGES IN OWNERSHIP OF ELECTRICAL APPLIANCES AND AMOUNT OF TIME SPEND DOING HOUSEWORKS FROM 1920 TO 2019.

THE USE OF WASHING MACHINE IN 1920 ARE VERY HIGH BY LEAVING OTHERS BELOW AT 40 THEN IT RISE AND TOUCH THE POINT 60 IN 1940 . AGAIN ITS RISES AT 70 IN 1960 BUT THEN WE SAW A SUDDEN CHANGE AND IT LOWERS AT 65 IN 1980 . IT RISES IN 2000 AT SAME POINT AS IT IS IN 1960 . BUT IN 2019 IT WAS AT HI HIGHEST POINT AT 75.

THE REFRIGERATOR HAS 0 PERCENTAGE IN 1920 BUT IT RISES BETWEEN 50 TO 55 IN 1940 .THE IT TOUCHES THE HIGHEST POINT AT 90 BY LEAVING A VERY LARGE GAP TO OTHER APPLIANCES . IT INCREASES AT ITS MAXIMUM POINT AT 100 PERCENTAGE AT BECAME SAME FROM 1980 TO 2019.

THE VACUUM CLEANER HAS 30 PERCENTAGE IN 1920 AND IT INCREASE TO 50 IN 1940 THE AGAIN RISES AT 70 IN 1960 . IN 1980 IT TOUCHES 90 AND IN 2000 ITS AT HIS HIGHEST POIT AT 100 SAME AS IN 2019.

THE NUMBERS OF HOUSEWORKS ARE DECREASING FROM 50 IN 1920 TO SOMEWHERE IN 30 TO 40 IN 1940 THEN IN 1960 AT 20 HOURS AND IN 1980 AND 200 BETWEEN 10 TO 20 . IN 2019 AT 10 HOURS .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting on the appliance ownership and the time spent on housework. However, the analysis is largely descriptive, listing data points rather than identifying key trends or making meaningful comparisons. For instance, the relationship between the rise in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours is not explicitly highlighted as a central feature. The overview is missing, which is a requirement for a higher band score. The data is generally accurate, but the lack of synthesis and the failure to provide a clear summary of the overall trends limit the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and mechanical. There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas within and between sentences, making the writing feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report. The progression of ideas is somewhat repetitive, as each paragraph follows the same rigid structure. To improve, you should use a wider range of transition signals (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') to create a smoother flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There is significant repetition of basic verbs like 'rises', 'increases', and 'touches'. Some word choices are inaccurate, such as 'the numbers of houseworks' (housework is uncountable) and 'at his highest poit' (spelling error and incorrect pronoun). The range is limited to basic descriptive terms, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Using more sophisticated vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'significant decline', would enhance the quality of the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the use... are', 'it rises... at became same'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper capitalization or spacing. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and the lack of complex sentence structures significantly impact the overall accuracy. Focusing on sentence variety and proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.

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