Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THE ASSIGNED LINE GRAPHS DEPICT THE CHANGES IN ELECTRICAL APPLIANCES AND THE AMOUNT OF THE SPENT DOING DOMESTIC WORK IN ONE NATION FROM 1920 TO 2012.

OVERALL, IT IS CLEARLY EVIDENT THAT THE REFRIGRATOR AND VACCUM CLEANER FALLOW DOWNWARD TREND .WHEREAS,THE WASHING MACHINE FALLOW THE UOWARD TREND .HOWEVER ,THE NUMBER OF HOURS PER DECLINE THROUGHOUT THE PERIOD.

IN DETAIL, IN TERM OF PERCENTAGE OF HOUSEHOLD APPLIANCES .IN 1920 THE REFRIGREATER OWNERSHIP WAS STOOD AT 0%. WHEREAS, THE PERCENTAGE OF VACCUM CLEANER STOOD AT 30%. AFTER 1920 THE REFRIGRETER OWNWERSHIP ESCALATE SHARPLY TO 100% IN 1980 BY EXCEEDING THE VACCUM CLEANER IN 1990.THE PERCENTAGE OF VACCUM CLEANER OWNERSHIP ALSO INCREASED TO 100%B IN 2000. AFTER THAT BOTH APPLIANCES OWNERSHIP REMAIN CONSTANT TILL 2019 THE FIGURE WAS RECORDED AS 100% . WASHING MACHINE OWNERSHIP BEGIN WITH 40% IN INITIAL YEAR WHICH GRADUALLY SURGE TO 70% IN 1960 THEN ITS FIGURE MODETELY DECINE TO NEARLY 60% IN 1980. HOWEVER, ITS FIGURE AGAIN ROSE TO 72% IN 2019.

ADDITIONLY THE NUMBER OF HOURS IN 1920 STOOD AT 50 WHICH SHARLY DECINED THROUGHOUT THE PERIOD AND REACH AT HOURS PER WEEK IN FINAL YEAR.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends for appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state the refrigerator ownership started at 0% in 1920, whereas the chart shows it starting at 0% but the vacuum cleaner starting at 30%. You also claim the refrigerator exceeded the vacuum cleaner in 1990, but the lines cross much earlier. Furthermore, the final sentence regarding housework hours is incomplete ('reach at hours per week'). While the main trends are identified, the lack of precision in data interpretation and the incomplete final sentence limit the task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'IN DETAIL, IN TERM OF PERCENTAGE OF HOUSEHOLD APPLIANCES' is an awkward transition. The punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and capitalization (e.g., 'HOWEVER ,THE NUMBER'). While there is a clear overall progression, the lack of control over linking words and punctuation makes the flow feel disjointed at times. Improving the use of referencing and punctuation would significantly enhance the readability of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but contains frequent spelling errors, such as 'REFRIGRATOR', 'VACCUM', 'FALLOW', and 'MODETELY'. These errors are distracting and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'ownership', 'surge', and 'constant', the range is limited and the repetition of basic verbs like 'stood at' and 'increased' suggests a need for more variety. To reach a higher band, you should focus on accurate spelling and incorporating a wider range of synonyms to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'dipped'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response relies on simple sentence structures with frequent grammatical errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('WASHING MACHINE OWNERSHIP BEGIN', 'REFRIGRETER OWNWERSHIP ESCALATE'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The punctuation is also poor, with spaces placed before commas and periods, and the text is written entirely in uppercase, which is inappropriate for formal writing. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation structures prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors is essential.

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