Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chat illustrates information about the change ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in houseland in one country between 1920 and 2019.
overall, it is clear that the percentage of houseland with electrical appliances. in addition use of washing machine, refrigerator, and vaccum cleaner. furthermore, refrigerator recorded the highest figure, whereas washing machine had the lowest.
At the baginning of the period, refrigerator
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it is only 70 words long. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The summary is incomplete, as it cuts off mid-sentence and fails to provide a comprehensive overview of the data or report on the housework time trends. The main features are not adequately selected or compared, and the response lacks the necessary development to reach a higher band. To improve, you must complete the full analysis of all data points and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response lacks a logical structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the lack of paragraphing and the abrupt ending prevent the development of a coherent argument. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive way, such as 'in addition' and 'furthermore', which do not effectively link ideas. The progression of information is hindered by the unfinished sentences and the lack of a clear conclusion or body paragraphs. To improve, focus on organizing your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs for detailed comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'bar chat' instead of 'bar chart', 'houseland' instead of 'households', and 'vaccum' instead of 'vacuum'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data points effectively. You should aim to use a wider range of academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant increase'. Improving your spelling and learning collocations for describing charts will help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, fragmented sentences. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, such as missing articles ('the' change in ownership) and incorrect sentence structure ('overall, it is clear that the percentage of houseland with electrical appliances' is an incomplete sentence). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with periods placed incorrectly within sentences. To improve, focus on constructing complete sentences with a subject and a verb, and practice using complex structures like relative clauses or comparative forms to describe the data more accurately.
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