Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts describe the comparative data from the year 1920 until 2019. The number of people having Electrical appliances and the time spent on household work.
overall, It can be seen that as the years went by, more and more people started buying electrical appliances also the time spent for household work was decreased.
Firstly, In the year 1920, the percentage of households with a washing machine was lowest as compared to other two appliances. In the following years, there were same proportion in all three Electric appliances. Moreover, the percentage of households with a refrigerator increased in the year 1940 to until 1980. The percentage of two electrical appliances were same in the year 1960. Surprisingly after 1980, their was no usage of Refrigerator in upcoming year from 1980 to until 2019. In the last year (2019), people only use Vacuum cleaner and washing machine for their household work.
The highest number of hours per week was in 1920 but that number went down year by year and the lowest number was only 10 hours per week.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to summarize the charts but fails to accurately report the data. There are significant inaccuracies in the interpretation of the graphs, such as the claim that refrigerator usage ceased after 1980, which contradicts the visual data. The overview is too simplistic and lacks a clear connection between the two trends. While the main features are identified, the lack of precision in data reporting and the misinterpretation of the trends prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure that you carefully read the axes and data points before writing, and focus on highlighting the most significant trends rather than listing individual years without context.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the use of 'Surprisingly' to introduce a factual error. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, particularly in the transition between the discussion of appliances and the time spent on housework. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the different appliances. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring a logical flow between sentences would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'number of people having' and 'went down year by year' are basic and lack the precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. There are also issues with word choice and capitalization, such as 'Electric appliances' and 'Refrigerator' being capitalized inconsistently. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility or precision expected at higher bands. Incorporating more specific terminology related to trends and data, such as 'fluctuated,' 'declined steadily,' or 'reached a peak,' would improve the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'there were same proportion,' 'their was no usage,' and 'in the upcoming year from 1980 to until 2019.' These errors, along with issues in punctuation and article usage, occasionally impede the flow of the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of control over basic grammatical structures and the presence of frequent errors limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will help in achieving greater accuracy.
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