Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts describe the comparative data from the year 1920 until 2019. The number of people having Electrical appliances and the time spent on household work.
overall, It can be seen that as the years went by, more and more people started buying electrical appliances also the time spent for household work was decreased.
Firstly, In the year 1920, the percentage of households with a washing machine was lowest as compared to other two appliances. In the following years, there were same proportion in all three Electric appliances. Moreover, the percentage of households with a refrigerator increased in the year 1940 to until 1980. The percentage of two electrical appliances were same in the year 1960. Surprisingly after 1980, their was no usage of Refrigerator in upcoming year from 1980 to until 2019. In the last year (2019), people only use Vacuum cleaner and washing machine for their household work.
The highest number of hours per week was in 1920 but that number went down year by year and the lowest number was only 10 hours per week.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to summarize the charts but fails to accurately report the data. There are significant factual errors, such as the claim that refrigerator usage ceased after 1980, which contradicts the visual data. The overview is too brief and lacks a clear connection between the two charts. Key features, such as the specific percentages or the clear trends in housework hours, are not sufficiently highlighted or supported by the data. The response lacks the analytical depth required for a Band 6 or higher, as it misinterprets the provided information, leading to a failure to fully address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the use of 'Surprisingly' to introduce a factual error. The progression of ideas is disjointed, particularly in the transition between the appliance data and the housework hours. While there is an attempt at an introduction and body paragraphs, the logical flow is hindered by the lack of clear comparisons and the inaccurate reporting of the trends. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making the relationship between the data points difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'number', 'percentage', and 'appliances'. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing trends or data comparisons. Some word choices are imprecise, such as 'comparative data' or 'upcoming year', which do not accurately reflect the context of the charts. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the occasional misuse of terms prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'gradual decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentences, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the year 1920'), subject-verb agreement ('there were same proportion'), and awkward phrasing ('there was no usage of Refrigerator'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary capitalization of words like 'Refrigerator' and 'Electric'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be distracting. A greater focus on sentence structure and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve the quality of the writing.
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