Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The following article summarises changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between the year 1920 and 2019.
From the year 1920 to 2019 there has been 100% ownership of refrigerators , Vacuum cleaners were initially at 30% and gradually increased to 100% in 2000. Washing machines ownership still lacks in many households the graph depicted 40% ownership in 1920 which grew at an abnormal rate up to 75% in the year 2019 .
Due to the ownership of such house help appliances the number of hours of housework per week and per household has been declining at an alarming rate. The housework includes washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning the house.
The data shows 50 hours of work per week in 1920 which fell to 10 hours in the year 2019 , the key reason is the technological advancement.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you correctly identify the trends for refrigerators, vacuum cleaners, and washing machines, the description of the washing machine ownership as growing at an 'abnormal rate' is subjective and lacks precision. Furthermore, the report fails to provide a clear overview or summary of the relationship between the two charts, which is a key requirement for Task 1. To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a clear, data-driven summary that highlights the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and housework hours without using emotive language.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and somewhat mechanical. For example, the transition between the appliance data and the housework data is abrupt. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, which limits the flow of information. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the logical progression of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher score. Phrases like 'abnormal rate' and 'house help appliances' are slightly unnatural in this context. You also repeat the word 'ownership' several times, which makes the writing feel repetitive. To improve, try to use a more varied range of synonyms and collocations related to data description, such as 'steady increase', 'sharp decline', or 'fluctuation', and ensure your word choices are appropriate for a formal academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that occasionally affect clarity. For instance, 'Washing machines ownership still lacks in many households' is grammatically awkward, and there are issues with punctuation, such as the unnecessary space before commas. Additionally, some sentences are run-on or lack proper conjunctions. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and punctuation errors to ensure your writing is more accurate and professional.
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