Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The rendered line graph gives information obout amount of households with electrical appliances in 1920 to 2019 and number of hours of housework.

Overall, it can be seen that as electrical applinces are increasing hours of housework is decreasing.

Evidently, it is quite apparent that in 2000 washing machine and refrigerator become basic needs as 100% of households have them in there houses. Furthermore, use of refrigerator grows dramaticaly from 0% to 90% in 40 years. Correspondingly, usage of washing machine went up gradualy from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000 it took 80 years to reach at top. Whereas, refigerator takes only 60 years to achive 100% usage in households.

Moving on further, usage of vacuum cleaner fluctuates throghout the period. Initially, it increases for 40 years from 40% in 1920 to 70% in 1960 and then falls significantly to 60% in 1980. Lastly, it grows from there to 70% in 2019. Strikingly, in 1940 all three appliances comes in same zone between 50% to 60%.

At the last, as amout of electrical appliance increases number of hours of housework decreases as it used to be 50 hours per week in 1920 decreased to 10 hours per week in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all key features of the charts, including the trends for the three appliances and the inverse relationship with housework hours. The overview is clear and effectively highlights the main trend. However, some data points are slightly inaccurate or confusingly phrased, such as the claim that all appliances reached 100% by 2000, whereas the graph shows different trajectories. The comparison between the appliances is generally well-handled, but the analysis could be more precise regarding the specific timeframes and percentages to fully meet the requirements for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organised into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for the appliances, and a concluding summary. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Correspondingly', and 'Moving on further' are used to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. The referencing is generally clear, but the paragraphing could be more refined to separate the appliance trends from the housework data more effectively. Overall, the progression of ideas is coherent.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with attempts to use descriptive terms like 'dramatically', 'fluctuates', and 'significantly'. However, there are several spelling errors ('obout', 'applinces', 'dramaticaly', 'gradualy', 'throghout', 'amout') and some word choice issues ('come in same zone'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent the meaning from being understood. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and using more precise collocations for data description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('washing machine and refrigerator become', 'all three appliances comes') and article usage ('the amount of', 'the usage of'). While these errors are frequent, they rarely impede communication. The control over punctuation is generally acceptable, but the sentence structure could be more varied to demonstrate higher proficiency. Focusing on consistent verb tenses and article usage will help improve the accuracy of the writing.

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