Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graphs illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of period spent doing housework such as washing clothes and cleaning in one nation between 1920 and 2019 in percentage. While the house work per week decreased dramatically throughout the period.

Overall, vacuum cleaner ownership increased slightly throughout the period; however, proprietorship of washing machine rose year by year it experienced decline in middle of the century. Whereas, refrigerator ownership followed a clear upward trend.

In the year 1920, the proportion of washing machine owners was accounted for 40%, which was surged by 20% and climbed to 60% in 1940. In addition, in 1960 it again grown by 10% and stood at 70%, while it fell dramatically to roughly 63% and then it followed an upward trend where it recorded highest proportion 73%. Ownership of refrigerator rose dramatically from 0% in 1920 to approximately 53% in 1940 and it surged to 90% in the year 1960. After that, it reached to 100% in 1980 where the proportion remained still by the end of the period in the year 2019. Vacuum cleaner proprietorship also increased significantly from 30% in 1920 to 70% in 1960 and vacuum was the second to marked 100% ownership after refrigerator in the year 2000.

Housework such as washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning gradually declined from the year 1920 which was 50% and decreased by 30% and plunged to 20% in the year 1960 and dipped to mere 10% in the year 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all parts of the task, including the trends for both appliances and housework. You have successfully identified the main features and made relevant comparisons. However, the introductory sentence is grammatically incomplete, and the overview is slightly disjointed. While you have included data points, some of the descriptions of the trends are slightly inaccurate (e.g., stating the washing machine ownership 'surged' when it actually fluctuated). To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview provides a clearer summary of the overall trends rather than just listing individual appliance movements. The data selection is generally good, but ensure that the relationship between the rise in appliances and the decline in housework is explicitly highlighted as a key feature.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'While', and 'After that' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For instance, the second paragraph starts with 'Overall', but the sentence structure within that paragraph is a bit repetitive. Referencing is generally clear, but the connection between the decline in housework and the rise in appliances could be more smoothly integrated to improve the overall progression of the argument. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different categories of data.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proprietorship', 'proportion', and 'plunged'. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For example, 'amount of period' is unnatural; 'time spent' would be better. 'Proprietorship' is a bit formal and less common in this context than 'ownership'. There are also minor errors in word formation, such as 'second to marked' instead of 'second to mark'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations for describing data trends, such as 'a steady increase' or 'a significant decline', and ensure that vocabulary is used in the correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. The first paragraph contains a sentence fragment: 'While the house work per week decreased dramatically throughout the period.' This lacks a main clause. There are also errors in verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'it again grown' instead of 'it again grew' and 'was accounted for 40%' (passive voice error). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your complex sentences are grammatically sound.

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