Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given line charts illustrate the percentage of families with three distinct electrical equioments and exoenditure of time spend on housework per household per week in a nation from 1920 to 2019.
The proportion of households owning refrigerator increased dramatically from 0 to 100 during this 60-year period reached the peak and maintained unchanged for the rest of the time, overtaking the figure for vacuum cleaner and washing machine at almost 48 in 1938 and at around 60 in 1943 respectively. Similarly, the percentage of families which have vacuum cleaner showed a same significant trend from 30 to 100 between 1920 and 2000 and remained static in the next 10 years, overtaking the figure that of washing machine at 70 in 1960. What is more, a slight rise can be noticed in the figure for washing machine from 40 to approximately 75 during the whole timescale, with being the lowest level among three electrical appliances.
On the other hand, there was a substantial decrease in the spend of time of domestic work in a family every week from 50 to only 10 over a span of 100 years.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of households with electrical appliances showed an upward trend while the expense of hours of housework experienced a downward trend throughout the whole period of 1920 to 2019 in question, with the figure for refrigerator and vacuum cleaner both being the highest level by 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The student provides a clear overview of the changes in appliance ownership and housework time. However, the description lacks some detail, as it does not include specific percentages for all appliances, limiting the depth of the comparison. The statement about the use of appliances could also be clearer—specific years mentioned lack a clearer connection to the overall trends. Overall, the response meets the task requirements but misses some nuances that could enhance clarity and thoroughness.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The structure of the response is generally logical, beginning with a general overview and followed by specific details. However, the use of connectors and linking phrases could be improved for better coherence, especially when comparing trends (e.g., clarity about the timeline). Some sentences are awkwardly constructed, which impairs fluidity—e.g., 'similarly, the percentage of families which have vacuum cleaner showed a same significant trend.' This hinders the overall clarity and flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The vocabulary used shows some variety, but there are several instances of incorrect word forms and usage, such as 'equioments' instead of 'equipments' and 'spend' instead of 'spending.' This affects the precision of the language. Some words, like 'dramatic' and 'significant,' are appropriate but can be strengthened by using more specific terms to convey the trends. Overall, while the range is present, inaccuracies dilute the effectiveness of the vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Grammatical accuracy is inconsistent throughout the response. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the percentage of families which have vacuum cleaner' should use 'vacuum cleaners') along with awkward phrases and incorrect verb forms, such as 'the spend of time of domestic work.' However, the student demonstrates an understanding of tense and can convey ideas within complex sentences. Greater attention to grammatical precision could enhance clarity and professionalism.
Overall feedback
Your response effectively summarizes the trends regarding electrical appliances and housework. You demonstrated a good understanding of the charts, but pay attention to include specific numerical data for each point to enhance your comparisons. Improving the clarity of your sentences will also help your response flow better. Ensure correct word forms and focus on grammatical accuracy to convey ideas more clearly. A stronger range of vocabulary will enhance your descriptions; for example, try to use synonyms that add more depth to your analysis. Overall, you have a good foundation; focus on these areas for improvement!
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