Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The charts compare the percentage of household that owned three electrical appliances such as washing machine, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner and the average number of housework per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, increase in three of appliances over the period and refrigerator and vacuum cleaner are the most used electrical appliances, while washing machine slightly below from this two, followed by hours per week gradually decrease over the years.

Refrigerator was at 0% in 1920, and washing machine and vacuum cleaner at 30 % and one at 40% in 1920, but in 1940 all three were at same percentage between 50 to 60% refrigerator experienced significant change, while in 1980 washing machine slightly sank to 61% before gradually rose to 71 in 2019.

Vacuum cleaner substantially swelled in 1980 at 90%, while refrigerator is dominated at 100%. Furthermore in year 2000 and 2019 both refrigerator and vacuum cleaner at same percentage around 100%.

At the same time, the average amount of housework per household dropped dramatically. It decreased from 50 hours per week in 1920 to 35 hours, in 1940 and 20 hours in 1960. The figure continued to fall to around 15 hours in 1980 and 10 hours in 2000, reaching only 10 hours per week by 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all parts of the task, identifying the main trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. You successfully highlight the key features, such as the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and housework time. However, the overview is slightly disjointed and could be more clearly articulated. While you mention the trends, some data points are presented in a list-like fashion, which hinders the 'clear overview' requirement for higher bands. To improve, ensure the overview synthesizes the information rather than just listing the appliances. The data is generally accurate, though the phrasing 'one at 40%' is vague.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Furthermore' and 'At the same time', to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'one at 40%'). The paragraphing is appropriate, but the transition between the appliance data and the housework data could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that every pronoun has a clear antecedent would help elevate the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'substantially', 'dramatically', and 'dominated'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'washing machine slightly sank' and 'vacuum cleaner substantially swelled'. These choices are not entirely natural in an academic context. While the meaning is clear, the lack of precision in word choice prevents a higher score. Focus on using verbs that accurately describe statistical trends, such as 'declined', 'surged', or 'plateaued', rather than more informal or imprecise alternatives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include missing articles ('the refrigerator'), subject-verb agreement ('refrigerator and vacuum cleaner at same percentage'), and awkward phrasing ('increase in three of appliances'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and pay closer attention to the use of articles and prepositions.

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