Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The line graph illustrates the percentage of households with electrical appliances and number of hours of housework in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall, it can be noticed that appliances increased significantly during the period of time. Number of hours of housework declined slightly during the period of time.
In 1920, usage of refrigerator was almost 0%. Vacuum cleaner accounted for 30% while, washing machine at 40%. In 1960, usage of refrigerator skyrocket at 90%. Vacuum cleaner and washing machine increased significantly intersect each other at 70% in 1960. Refrigerator peaked at 100% in 1980. Vacuum cleaner rose with 20 points while, washing machine experienced slight dropped between 60% and 70%. In the end, refrigerator remained unchanged with same percentage. Vacuum cleaner stood at 100% in 2019 while, washing machine experienced some fluctuation and reach at around 73% in 2019.
In 1920, people spent 50 hours per week for their housework. This figure declined significantly in 1960 at 20 hours per week. In 1980, around 15 hours per week used for household activities. By the end of 2019, the number of hours for housework declined slightly at nearly 10 hours.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends in appliance ownership and housework hours. You have successfully selected key data points to support your descriptions. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the two charts, such as linking the rise in appliance ownership to the decline in housework hours. The overview is clear, but the description of the data is occasionally slightly mechanical. To reach a higher band, ensure that you synthesize the information rather than just listing the figures for each category sequentially.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the two different datasets. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In 1920' and 'By the end of 2019', which help guide the reader through the timeline. However, some transitions are a bit repetitive, and the use of cohesive devices could be more varied to improve the flow between sentences. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is generally easy to follow throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'skyrocket', 'fluctuation', and 'intersect'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'experienced slight dropped' (should be 'drop') and 'usage of refrigerator was almost 0%' (should be 'the usage of the refrigerator'). While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, incorporating more precise collocations and avoiding minor grammatical errors in word forms would elevate the score. The range is functional but lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as missing articles ('usage of refrigerator') and incorrect verb forms ('washing machine experienced slight dropped'). Additionally, some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'Vacuum cleaner rose with 20 points'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will help improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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