Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The charts illustrate the percentage of households with three different electrical appliances (washing machine, Refrigerator and Vacuum cleaner) and the number of hours of housework per week per household in a country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, the proportion of the three appliances usage in households increased significantly within the given period. Meanwhile, the refrigerator experience the highest usage followed by vacuum cleaner. However, washing machine was the least in the period given.

In 1920, the proportion of the refrigerator started at 0%, this number increased significantly in 1940 to above 50%. However, vacuum cleaner begun at 30% in 1920, which later increased to around 70% in 1960. Meanwhile, both the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner electrical appliances increased to 90% each, before they experienced a steady usage at around 100% in the following years accordingly. By contrast, the washing machine shared the highest proportion of households usage in 1920 beginning at 40% and later increased significantly to 70% in 1940 , which later decline to below 70% in 1980 and rose to 70% and about 73% in 2000 and 2019 respectively.

The number of hours of house work per week and per household decreased drastically in the following years. In 1920, hours per week per household usage started at around 50. This figure fell drastically to around10 and finally to above 10 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all parts of the task, including the trends for both appliances and housework hours. You have successfully identified the main features and made relevant comparisons. However, there are some inaccuracies in your data reporting. For instance, you state the washing machine was the 'least' in the period, but the graph shows it was the highest in 1920 and remained significant throughout. Additionally, your description of the refrigerator starting at 0% in 1920 is correct, but your summary of the washing machine's trend is slightly confusing. To improve, ensure your data points are precisely aligned with the visual information provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'However', and 'By contrast' to link ideas. While the progression is generally clear, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The referencing is mostly effective, though the flow between the appliance data and the housework hours could be smoother. Overall, the structure is appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response, and the information is presented in a way that is easy for the reader to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'significantly', and 'drastically'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'refrigerator experience' (should be 'experienced') and 'washing machine shared the highest proportion' (where 'accounted for' would be more natural). You also repeat the word 'usage' frequently. To reach a higher band, try to vary your vocabulary by using synonyms and more precise collocations related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'accounted for'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'refrigerator started at 0%, this number increased' (a comma splice), 'vacuum cleaner begun' (should be 'began'), and 'house work' (should be one word). There are also some issues with article usage and tense consistency. Despite these errors, they do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are punctuated correctly to avoid run-on sentences or comma splices.

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