Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line chart presents the information about the changes in ownership of 3 different electrical appliances ( Washing machines, Refrigerator and vacuum cleaner) from 1920 to 2019

it is evident that, over the year the all of three appliance had reported the significant growth especially the refrigerator had shown highest significant growth,

By 1920, the Refrigerator had the zero house hold usage, then after it reported the sky rocket growth till 1960 which accounted 90 % of total house hold usage,from 1980 to 2019 the refrigerator reached to 100% in household, similarly the ownership of vacuum cleaner also evident the dramatic rowth from 1920 to 2019. In 1920 the vacuum cleaner was owned by 40% of total house hold which reached to 100% by 2000 and 2019

However, the washing machine had marked the unstable and lowest usage in house hold, from beginning years it was on the top most in house hold electrical appliance by initial year it was 40% which had shown the significant growth till 1960 which reached to 70% but in two decades the sales got declined by nearly 60% then after it shown the steady growth till 2019 which reached by more then 70%of total house hold ownership

Regarding the the number of hours spent on house work ( washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning by per week get surge declined over the years by 1920 it was on its peak by 50 hours per week which get dropped by 15 hours over the years by 1960 it get decreased to 20%, from 1980 to 2019 it get dropped to 10 hours

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided data to support your descriptions. You covered all three appliances and the housework time trend. However, the response lacks a clear overview paragraph, which is essential for a Band 7 or higher. Additionally, some data points are slightly inaccurate or confusingly phrased, such as the claim that the washing machine was 'on the top most' in 1920 when the chart shows it starting at 0%. To improve, ensure you group information logically and provide a concise summary of the overall trends in the introduction or a separate paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'then after', 'by 1920', 'from 1980 to 2019'). The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, and the lack of a clear overview makes the progression of ideas feel disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data comparison.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, including terms like 'ownership', 'significant growth', and 'declined'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'sky rocket growth', 'rowth' (spelling), and 'get surge declined'. Some collocations are unnatural, which occasionally forces the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning. Increasing your range of precise verbs and adverbs to describe trends would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'it shown the steady growth'), missing articles, and punctuation errors. The sentence structure is often repetitive, relying heavily on simple clauses. To reach a higher band, focus on reducing errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, and try to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or participial phrases, to improve the flow and accuracy of your writing.

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