Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The chart illustrates percentages of households with three electronic appliances such as washing machine,refrigerator and vacuum cleaner and amount of time spent doing housework per week in one country between 1920 and 2019.

overall, ownership of all three appliances increased substantially over the period, with refrigerator and vacuum cleaner saw a huge increase. whereas number of hours of housework per week decreased dramatically.

In 1920, 40% of household owned washing machine, while approximately 30% owned vacuum cleaner whereas almost none of them owned refrigerator. over the next few decades, ownership of all three appliance rose steadily. Refrigerator ownership increased most rapidly reaching 90% in 1960 and 100% by 1980 , whereas it remained steady at 100% by 2019. vacuum cleaner also showed consistent increase by 50% in 1940 to 100% in 2000 and remain steady by 2019. washing machine also saw increase in 1960 to 70% and then a steady decrease in year 1980 to 60% and by the year 2000 to 2019 it stayed steady between 60 to 65%.

furthermore, average hours of house work per week decreased from 50% in 1920 , almost dropped to 10 % by year 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task, identifying the main trends for both appliance ownership and housework hours. You successfully highlighted the inverse relationship between the two datasets. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by inaccuracies in data reporting. For example, you stated that housework hours dropped to '10%' in 2019, whereas the graph shows a drop to 10 hours. Additionally, the description of the washing machine trend is slightly confusing, as the data shows a rise to 70% in 1960 followed by a decline, which you captured, but the phrasing could be more precise. Overall, the key features are selected, but the accuracy of the data interpretation needs more attention to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'whereas', 'furthermore', and 'over the next few decades' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. The referencing is generally clear, but the lack of consistent punctuation (e.g., missing spaces after commas and inconsistent capitalisation) makes the text feel less professional and slightly harder to follow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring standard paragraph structure will help improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'substantially', 'dramatically', and 'consistent increase'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'number of hours of housework' (which should be 'the number of hours') and 'almost none of them owned refrigerator' (missing an article). There are also issues with basic spelling and punctuation, such as 'house work' instead of 'housework'. To improve, focus on using articles (a/the) correctly and expanding your range of reporting verbs beyond 'increased' or 'showed'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences with 'whereas' and 'while', there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Common issues include missing articles ('owned washing machine'), incorrect verb tenses, and inconsistent capitalisation at the start of sentences. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Focusing on sentence-level accuracy, particularly subject-verb agreement and article usage, will significantly improve your score.

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