Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the proportion of households with appliances and number of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, the percentage of households with electrical appliances by refrigerator and vacuum cleaner had the highest proportion althoughout the period, while, washing machine fluctuated throughout the period. However, the number of hours of housework showrd gradual decline.

The accounted of households with electrical appliance by refrigerator showed at about 0% in 1920. It then rose significantly at just over 50% in 1940 before increasing at almost 90 in 1960 and increased gradually at about 100 in 1980 and then fluctuated at around 100% in 200 and 100 in 2019. Vaccum cleaner began at about 30% in 1920 and increased sharply at almost 50% in 1940, 70% in 1960, 90% in 1980 and 100% in 2019. It then fluctuated in 2019. Wshing machine stood at about 40% in 1920.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is incomplete. You have described the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner trends, but you failed to provide any data or description for the 'hours of housework' trend, which is a key component of the prompt. Furthermore, the response ends abruptly mid-sentence, leaving the description of the washing machine incomplete. To improve, ensure you address all data sets presented in the charts and provide a complete summary that covers the entire timeframe provided in the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into an introduction and body paragraphs, which is a good start. However, the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'However', the transition between ideas is sometimes mechanical. The lack of a concluding summary or a fully developed final point makes the progression feel disjointed. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear focus and that you complete your sentences and thoughts before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a basic range of vocabulary, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', and 'sharply', which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'accounted' instead of 'account' or 'percentage', 'Vaccum' instead of 'Vacuum', and 'Wshing' instead of 'Washing'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends and ensure you proofread for spelling accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'number of time spent' (should be 'amount of time'), 'showrd' (spelling), and 'at about 100 in 200' (likely meant 2000). The sentence structure is often repetitive, and the incomplete final sentence significantly impacts the grammatical integrity of the conclusion. To improve, work on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound before moving on.

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