Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given charts illustrated the exchange in ownership of electrical appliances and how the time spent doing house work in one country in 1920 and 2019.
Overall refrigerator took up the large share of spending electricity , while washing machine accounted for the smallest proportion .
In year. 1920 refrigerator have a least share of spending electricity and made up the largest share in 1940 sand increasingly slightly in 2019 ,while comparing washing machine it was fluctuated yearly and last one was vaccum cleaner it was very less in 1920 and rose higher in 2019 .
In 1920 has a greatest number of hours it was about 50 and decrease slightly towards 10 in 2019 year .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the student attempts to summarise the charts, the information provided is incomplete and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the task. Key trends are mentioned, but the analysis is superficial and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the appliances or the time spent on housework. The lack of data points and the failure to cover the full scope of the charts result in an underdeveloped response that does not fully satisfy the requirements of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is poorly structured, with very short, disjointed paragraphs that lack logical flow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the progression of information difficult to follow. The use of paragraphing is ineffective, and the transition between the description of appliances and the time spent on housework is abrupt. The response lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, and the overall arrangement of information is fragmented, which hinders the reader's ability to understand the relationship between the data sets.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on the same phrases to describe trends. There are several instances of inaccurate word choice, such as 'exchange in ownership' instead of 'changes in ownership' and 'spending electricity' instead of 'household ownership'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the student struggles to use precise terminology to describe the data trends (e.g., 'rose higher' instead of 'increased significantly'). These errors and the limited range of lexical items make the writing feel simplistic and occasionally unclear.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('refrigerator have a least share'), tense usage ('illustrated' vs 'illustrate'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'In year. 1920 refrigerator have a least share...'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary periods and missing commas. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors that occur throughout the text, which significantly affects the readability of the response.
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