Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Introduction - The chart below the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of times spent doing houseworker in households in one country between 1920 and 1919.

Overview - Chart shows number of households incrase electrical appliances washing machine , refrigerator and vacuum cleaner both similar incrase. Households years by years work drop in the end.

Body Paragraph 1: In this paragraph in 1920 Refrigerator number zero, and washing machine and vacuum cleaner 40 to 30 percentage in households. Where as mostly in chart refrigerator take over percentage after 1980s , then in 2000 vacuum cleaner most of the households appliances.

Body Paragraph 2: In 1920 most of the house take a worker per week for washing clothes , preparing meals cleaning house. After the electrical appliances 1920 in number of households 50 hours per week. After the years number decrase per years 10. Presently households worker zero because of electrical appliance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The overview is disjointed and lacks a clear synthesis of the trends, such as the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and housework time. The data points provided are often inaccurate or confusing, such as stating 'refrigerator number zero' in 1920 or claiming 'presently households worker zero'. The response lacks a professional tone and fails to highlight the main features effectively, resulting in a fragmented report that does not fully meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often incorrect, such as the repetitive use of 'After the' to start sentences. There is no clear transition between the description of appliances and the description of housework time. The lack of linking words and the disjointed sentence structure make the text difficult to follow, and the referencing of data is often unclear, which hinders the overall flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'number', 'increase', and 'households' throughout the text. There are significant errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'houseworker' instead of 'housework' and 'take a worker' instead of 'spent time on housework'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or academic style, and the errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is highly problematic, with frequent errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and article usage. Many sentences are fragments or lack essential verbs, such as 'Chart shows number of households incrase electrical appliances'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences produced are often grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the errors are frequent enough to cause significant difficulty for the reader, indicating a lack of control over basic grammatical rules.

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