Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrates the employment proportion in three diverse sectors, which include public sector, private sector and own business of economy in Great Britain from 2000 to 2010.

Overall, it is evident that public sector and self-employed workers increased over the period. In contrast private sectors fell continuously meanwhile public sector recorded the highest figure for employment whereas self employed has the least proportion throughout the period.

Looking at the more details, public sector grew from 38 in first years then rose sharply from 40 to around 50 in 2005 then 45 in 2006 before dipping to around at approximately 57 by the end of the period. Similarly self employed grew from 18 in initial year to reach of 20 in after two years then 18 in 2004 before declined at about 30 in the final year respectively.

In contrast private sector fell continuously around 48 in first year, decreased to 40 in 2003 then decreased dramatically to reached at the bottom at about just 20 in 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response fails to address the task prompt entirely. The instructions ask for a summary of electrical appliance ownership and housework time between 1920 and 2019. However, the student has written about employment sectors in Great Britain from 2000 to 2010. This is a complete mismatch of content. While the student does attempt to report trends and main features, the information provided is irrelevant to the data presented in the task. Consequently, the response cannot be assessed for accuracy regarding the provided charts, leading to a very low score for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'Similarly'. However, the logical progression is undermined by the fact that the content does not relate to the prompt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. Despite the complete irrelevance of the data, the structure itself follows a standard academic format, which prevents a lower score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is adequate for describing trends, using terms like 'increased', 'fell continuously', 'rose sharply', and 'dipping'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'employment proportion in three diverse sectors' and 'reached at the bottom'. The range is limited, and the vocabulary is repetitive. While the student can communicate basic ideas about trends, the lack of precision and the misuse of terminology in the context of the actual task limit the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'public sector grew from 38 in first years', 'before declined at about 30', and 'decreased dramatically to reached at the bottom'. These errors, particularly with verb tenses and prepositions, are frequent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents a higher band score.

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