Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph illustrates the employment proportion in three diverse sectors, which include the public sector, private sector and own business of the economy in Great Britain from 2000 to 2010.
Overall, it is evident that the public sector and self-employed workers increased over the period. In contrast, the private sector fell continuously, while the public sector recorded the highest figure for employment, whereas self-employed people had the least proportion throughout the period.
Looking at the details, the public sector grew from 38 in the first year, then rose sharply from 40 to around 50 in 2005, then 45 in 2006, before dipping to approximately 57 by the end of the period. Similarly, self-employed people grew from 18 in the initial year to reach 20 after two years, then 18 in 2004, before declining to about 30 in the final year, respectively.
In contrast, the private sector fell continuously from around 48 in the first year, decreased to 40 in 2003, and then decreased dramatically to reach the bottom at about just 20 in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0
The response fails to address the task provided. The prompt asks for a summary of charts regarding electrical appliance ownership and housework time between 1920 and 2019. However, the student has written a report about employment sectors in Great Britain from 2000 to 2010. This is a complete mismatch of the data provided. While the student does attempt to summarize trends and provide an overview, the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt. Consequently, the response cannot be assessed as a valid attempt at the specific task, resulting in a very low score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Despite the off-topic content, the essay is structured in a logical manner. It includes an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that attempt to group information. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Similarly', and 'Overall' are used to link ideas. However, the referencing is sometimes confusing, and the logical progression is undermined by the fact that the data described does not exist in the provided prompt. The paragraphing is appropriate for a report, but the internal cohesion is hampered by the disconnect between the intended data and the written text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for a report-style task, featuring terms like 'illustrates', 'proportion', 'sharply', and 'declining'. There is an attempt to use a range of descriptive language to convey trends. However, there are inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'employment proportion' and 'reach the bottom at about just 20', which sound unnatural. The lexical range is limited and repetitive, and the student relies on basic structures to describe the data. More precise terminology related to trends and data analysis would be required for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the public sector grew from 38 in the first year... before dipping to approximately 57', where the logic of the numbers is inconsistent with the grammar. Additionally, there are issues with tense consistency and preposition usage. While the errors do not always impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a lack of control over complex structures. The punctuation is generally functional, but the overall grammatical accuracy is inconsistent.
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