Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the chart illustrate that the amount of washing machine in 1920 is 40% which enhances 20% in 1940and again increases 10% in 1960. The percentage of washing machine decrease about 10% and reaches at 60% inn 1980. At last in 2019, after 19 years the percentage reaches to about 75%. Percentage of refrigerator in 1920 is 0% but it gradually increases to 100% and remain for about 39%. Percentage of vacuum cleaner is comparatively low in 1920 to washing machine but it gradually increases and approaches to 100% . For about 19 years it remain ay 100%.

In 1920 range of hours is about 50 which solely decreases to between 10 and 20 and remain there for about 20 years. and then decreases to 10 in 2019

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some key features of the charts, the analysis is incomplete and lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends. The data reporting is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the statement that the refrigerator percentage 'remain for about 39%'. Furthermore, the response lacks a proper introduction and conclusion, and the description of the trends is fragmented. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the main trends and support your points with accurate data points from the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and paragraphing. There is no clear progression of ideas; the text reads as a series of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive report. Cohesive devices are largely absent, making the transition between the data for appliances and the housework hours abrupt. The use of referencing is unclear, and the overall structure does not facilitate a smooth reading experience. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs and use linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'subsequently') to connect your sentences and ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary range is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'percentage', 'increases', and 'decreases'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'enhances 20%' (instead of 'increases by 20%') and 'reaches at 60%' (instead of 'reaches 60%'). The lack of variety in reporting verbs and adverbs makes the writing feel mechanical. To improve, try to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a significant rise'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the chart illustrate', 'washing machine decrease'), incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'reaches at 60%'), and tense inconsistencies. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions when describing data.

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