Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph depicts the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing household works in one country.
Overall we can see that the number of people using electrical appliances has increased significantly and the number of hours spent for doing housework in households has decreased dramatically.
When we are comparing the line graphs we can see that 40 percentage of households used washing machine, 30 percentage of people used vacuum cleaner and zero to nil was the percentage of people used refrigerator in the year 1920 but in the year 2019 we can see that it has rose to 100 percentage household use for refrigerator and vacuum cleaner where washing machine use use increased to 75 percentage.
When we compare the number of hours of housework per week it was 50 hours in the beginning of the year 1920 and we can see sharp decline to 20 hours by the year 1960 and then by the year 2019 it declined to 10 hours per week.
Therefore we can find that increased used of home appliance used for doing household work has decreased the number of hours spent for doing the house works.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. You have successfully selected key data points to support your summary. However, the report could be improved by providing a more nuanced comparison between the two sets of data. For instance, while you mention the inverse relationship, you could explicitly link the specific growth of appliances to the specific milestones in the reduction of housework hours. The data reporting is generally accurate, though the phrasing 'zero to nil' is redundant and could be more precise.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding summary. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'When we are comparing' and 'When we compare' are used to start consecutive paragraphs, which limits the flow. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and use more sophisticated referencing to connect the trends in appliances directly to the trends in time spent on housework.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'increased significantly' and 'sharp decline'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'increased used of home appliance' (should be 'increased use') and 'zero to nil was the percentage'. The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing when describing trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'it has rose' (should be 'it has risen'), 'washing machine use use increased' (repetition), and 'percentage of people used' (should be 'percentage of people using'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the lack of commas in complex sentences. Improving your control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement will significantly enhance the clarity and professionalism of your writing.
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