Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph chart illustrates that in a single nation how people changes in ownership of electrical appliances during the housework within the time period of 1920 to 2019.
Overall, A refrigerator and Vacuum cleaner has recorded a remarkable growth about to 100 percent at the end of the 2019, and the Washing machine have maintained a stable growth with 74 percentage till the 2019.
Firstly, Refrigerators seen a rocket high growth from 1920 to 1980 about to 0 to 100 percent, Vacuum cleaner in 1920 started with 30 percent and ended with 90 percent of a gradual growth and the Washing machine has a fluctuated growth and fall, it done a all time low as compared to the Refrigerator and Vacuum cleaner about to 64 percentage.
Secondly, from the 1980 Refrigerator remained the same till 2019, regarding Vacuum cleaner has seen a dramatic growth about to 10 percent in 2000 and them it is to be the same as refrigerator. And Washing machine is gradually raised till the 2019. However, Hours per week performed house work has recorded a sudden fall from 50 to 10 percent in the time of 1920 to 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the trends for appliances and the inverse relationship with housework hours. However, the reporting is sometimes inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating that refrigerators grew from '0 to 100 percent' is a significant over-generalisation, and the description of the washing machine's trend is unclear. The data points mentioned are occasionally inconsistent with the visual information provided. To reach a higher band, you must ensure that the data is reported with greater precision and that the comparison between the appliances and the time spent on housework is more clearly articulated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'them it is to be the same as refrigerator', which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'rocket high growth', 'fluctuated growth and fall', and 'gradually raised'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the information being presented. While you attempt to use some descriptive language, the lack of precision in terminology (e.g., using 'growth' for all trends) restricts your ability to convey the data effectively. Expanding your range of verbs and adverbs to describe trends more accurately is essential for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including subject-verb agreement issues ('A refrigerator and Vacuum cleaner has recorded', 'Refrigerators seen'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures. The attempt at complex sentences often results in errors that can cause difficulty for the reader, such as 'in a single nation how people changes in ownership'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and subject-verb agreement.
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