Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph display the differenceate of the electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing work in country between 1920 and 2019 it change .

overall, in 1920 where the change first ten years many house has many electrical appliances then later ten years the electrical increases then next ten years this graph low after twenty years this slope in proper line .

In 1920 many house built in years in time graph high range than this graph in decreaseing in side in 1980 some worker work in building the graph in low percentage and 20

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 96 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The summary of the main features is extremely vague and lacks a clear overview of the trends shown in the charts. The description of the data is disjointed and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the ownership of appliances and the time spent on housework. The information provided is insufficient to satisfy the requirements of an Academic Task 1 response, as it does not clearly report the key data points or trends over the 1920–2019 period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphs are poorly defined, and the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas, making the text feel like a series of disconnected phrases. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is non-existent, and the use of referencing is unclear. The overall arrangement of information does not provide a coherent summary of the provided charts, which significantly hinders the reader's ability to understand the intended message.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which impedes communication. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'differenceate' instead of 'difference' or 'trends', and 'proper line' to describe a graph. The student relies on repetitive and basic language, failing to use the specific terminology required for describing data (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined', 'proportion'). The lack of control over word formation and collocation makes the response difficult to interpret, and the vocabulary is not sufficient to address the task effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being fragmented or run-on (e.g., 'The graph display the differenceate... it change .'). Subject-verb agreement is consistently incorrect, such as 'many house has' and 'the electrical increases'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing commas and periods in inappropriate places. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the high frequency of errors makes the text very difficult to read and understand.

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