Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The two chart are illustrate to electrical appliances and how time spend doing housework in household in country. it is 1920 and 2019 between when time show this. this is first chart is parcentange of household and second charts show this hours per week.
first charts it is between in 1920 to 2019. there are three type of electrical item and this item is washing machine, refrigerator and third vacuum cleaner. espacilllt, vacuum cleaner is very increase than other. mainly, 2019 in 100% of household with electrical appliance. it normally increase but 2000 and 2019 it do same leaval of years. washing machine is faster aplinces than other but in strating it does not applinces after 2 or 3 year it is very increase. and than 1980 to 2019 is same leaval of time prioyed so it is very enhance. refrigrator is not base leval but it does not increase.
seond charts is between in same blow. this is number of hours per work. in 1920 it is very increase but than after it is very decrease. 1960 in it is very decrease and than after it very deacrase. so it not popular it.
in counclude, it is higher percentage of electrical appliances and than second charts is very decrase than first charts. so it is not bad but dose not increase.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. While it identifies the three appliances and the trend of housework hours, the description of the trends is highly inaccurate and confusing. For example, stating that the vacuum cleaner is 'very increase' or that the refrigerator 'does not increase' contradicts the visual data provided in the charts. The response lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the information is presented in a disjointed manner that makes it difficult for the reader to understand the relationship between the rise in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression and clear paragraphing. While there is an attempt to separate the two charts into different sections, the internal structure of these paragraphs is chaotic. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'and than' and 'so it is'. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow the writer's train of thought. The overall arrangement of information is not coherent, and the lack of proper sentence structure further hinders the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous spelling errors ('parcentange', 'espacilllt', 'refrigrator', 'seond', 'counclude') and word choice errors ('same leaval of years', 'faster aplinces'). The writer struggles to use appropriate terminology to describe trends, relying on basic phrases like 'very increase' or 'very decrease' instead of more precise academic vocabulary such as 'significant growth' or 'steady decline'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that cause difficulty for the reader. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being fragmented or ungrammatical, such as 'The two chart are illustrate to electrical appliances'. Subject-verb agreement is consistently problematic, and there is a lack of complex structures. Punctuation is also misused throughout the text. While the meaning can occasionally be inferred, the high frequency of errors across all sentence types prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.
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