Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

percentage with of household electricity appliances is increasing day by day due to morden technologi. the first graph is saying about persentage of household and second para is elobrate as a number of hours of housework per week per house both graph are comparing with Xaxis and other is on yaxis the following persentage of househould appliences and number of hours of house work. will be discuss following paragraph.

fistly start with householdselectrical appliences. the Xaixses showing the years and yaxis is telling about persentage of househould appliences there comparing from 1920 to 2019 refregerator is high peak on 1918 which was high recoded past three remeaning years after 1960 to 2019 the referigrator was constently same little bit goes down wards to begain with washingmashing it slowly incressing 1920 to 1960 again its little bit curve down words 1960 to 1980 then slowely it's incresses 1980 to 2019. then comming to vacuum clener it's suddenly impact on intaiyer graph that unexpetedly rayses to 90% then it's same for remaning comming years to 100 comming tonext para

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. While it attempts to describe the trends, the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing, such as mentioning a 'high peak on 1918' when the graph starts in 1920. The description of the data is fragmented and lacks a clear overview or a summary of the main features. The second graph, regarding the number of hours spent on housework, is mentioned in the introduction but is never actually described in the body paragraphs. Consequently, the response does not provide a complete summary of the information presented in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization is poor. The response lacks clear paragraphing, and the transition between ideas is abrupt and confusing. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas logically. For instance, the transition 'comming tonext para' at the end of the text suggests an unfinished structure. The referencing is unclear, and the overall flow of the report is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and contains numerous spelling errors, such as 'morden' for modern, 'technologi' for technology, 'persentage' for percentage, 'refregerator' for refrigerator, and 'washingmashing' for washing machine. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; terms like 'high peak' and 'rayses' are used incorrectly or lack the necessary precision for an Academic Task 1 report. The frequent spelling mistakes and incorrect word choices significantly impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is weak. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and basic grammar, such as 'the first graph is saying about persentage' and 'both graph are comparing with Xaxis'. The use of articles and prepositions is consistently inaccurate. The response relies on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex descriptions are marred by errors that often distort the intended meaning. Punctuation is largely absent or misused throughout the text.

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