Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given chart illustrates the information about the alteration of the ownership of electrical devices and how much time spend while doing domestic works in household in a country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of households with home electronics had showed the increasing trend, whereas the number of hours of housework per week experienced the decreasing trend in the given span of time.

Moving into more details, the percentage of washing machine was inclined from 40% , with experienced slight downfall in 1960 and stood at 75% in 2019. The refrigerator had rapidly inclined, it was accounted as negligible in 1920 and then 50% for houses bought refrigerator in 1940. In 1960, the percentage of refrigerator was at 100% and then remained constant throughout the next years. The percentage of households with vacuum cleaner had significantly increased from 30% to 100% in 8 decades and then recorded as constant.

Furthermore, the number of hours of domestic works were declined by the time. In 1920, the the hours stood at 50 then decreased by 30 in 1960. There was fell with 10 in next 60 years and stood at 10 hours.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for both appliances and housework hours. You have successfully selected key features, such as the saturation of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, and made relevant comparisons between the two charts. However, the analysis is slightly hindered by some inaccuracies in data reporting. For example, stating that the washing machine 'experienced slight downfall in 1960' is not clearly supported by the visual data, and the description of the refrigerator reaching 100% in 1960 is slightly imprecise. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited with greater precision and that the relationship between the rise in appliances and the decline in housework is explicitly highlighted.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Moving into more details', and 'Furthermore' to guide the reader. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical. For instance, the transition between sentences in the second body paragraph is abrupt, and the use of referencing could be improved to avoid repetitive sentence structures. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the internal cohesion would benefit from a wider variety of linking words and more sophisticated referencing to connect the trends in appliances to the reduction in housework time.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'alteration', 'negligible', and 'inclined'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'how much time spend while doing domestic works' (should be 'time spent doing housework') and 'the percentage of washing machine was inclined' (should be 'the percentage of households with a washing machine increased'). These errors occasionally make the text sound unnatural. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing like 'inclined' or 'trend' when describing data changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'had showed the increasing trend' (incorrect tense), 'the the hours' (repetition), and 'There was fell with 10' (incorrect verb form and preposition). While the meaning is generally clear, these errors in verb tense and sentence construction prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that passive and active voice constructions are used accurately when describing statistical data.

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