Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph demonstrates the exchanges in holder of electrical gadgets and number of time spent doing house chores in families in one nation from 1920 and 2019.

overall, it can be observed that the proportion of residential family with electrical appliances between [redacted phone], And number of domestic chores per week and per residential household ([redacted phone]). although utilization of washing machine was most common in the year 1920. however refrig

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is significantly under the required 150-word minimum, which severely limits the ability to address the task requirements. The essay is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence after only 70 words. Consequently, the main features of the charts are not adequately selected or reported, and no meaningful comparisons are made. To improve, you must ensure you provide a complete overview and describe the key trends for all categories shown in the charts. Because the response is unfinished, it fails to meet the basic requirements of the task, resulting in a low score for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks a coherent structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the lack of body paragraphs and the abrupt ending prevent the development of a logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the awkward transition 'although... however' in the second paragraph. To improve, focus on organizing your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs detailing specific data points. Ensure that each sentence flows logically into the next using appropriate linking words.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several inaccuracies. Phrases like 'exchanges in holder of electrical gadgets' and 'number of time' are unnatural and imprecise. The word choice is often repetitive or incorrect, such as using 'residential family' instead of 'households'. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', or 'trend'. Additionally, work on collocations; for example, 'ownership of appliances' is more standard than 'holder of electrical gadgets'. Expanding your range of academic vocabulary will help convey your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that hinder clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as the sentence fragment starting with 'And number of domestic chores'. Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect capitalization and missing full stops. The use of complex structures is attempted but results in errors, such as the misuse of 'although' and 'however' in the same sentence. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex grammatical structures. Proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization errors is also essential.

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