Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line charts illustrates the three electrical appliances: washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner used in households and the time spent on doing housework from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, the use of all three electriconical devices had increased significantly throughout the years while the number of hours used in home work decreased.

The use of refrigerator was almost none in 1920 and it skyrocketed in the next 40 years reached just over 90% before reaching peakin 1980 at 100% and remained same in the next years. The vacuum cleaner had 305 of households in the starting years and it showed a upward trend reached a peak with 100% in the year 2000 and stay same in the next 19 years compared to washing macchine that showed fluctuation, it was accounted 40% in 1920 before reaching 70% in 1960 and then declined slightly in 1980 just over 60% and then showed an upward trend until 2019 at just over 70%.

The number of hours dedicated to house activity was 50 in 1920 and them they declined rapidly in the next 40 years and reached one-fifth before reaching all time lowest in 2019 with just 10 hours.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the charts, including the trends for the three appliances and the decline in housework hours. You have successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and time spent on housework. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in data reporting, such as the claim that the vacuum cleaner reached 100% in 2000, which is not clearly supported by the visual data provided. Additionally, the overview is slightly brief. To improve, ensure that data points are cited with greater precision and that the overview highlights the most significant trends more comprehensively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is generally clear, moving from the appliances to the housework hours. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the transition between sentences in the second body paragraph could be smoother. There are also some minor issues with referencing, such as 'remained same in the next years', which lacks a clear subject. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the flow of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'skyrocketed', 'fluctuation', and 'upward trend' appropriately. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'electriconical', 'peakin', and 'macchine', which detract from the overall quality. Additionally, there are some awkward collocations, such as 'almost none' instead of 'negligible' or 'minimal'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that spelling is accurate, as these errors can occasionally impede the reader's flow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'The given line charts illustrates' (subject-verb agreement), '305 of households' (likely a typo for 30%), and 'them they declined' (redundant pronoun). Punctuation is also inconsistent in places. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for minor slips. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

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