Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the given charts shows the changes of ownership of three electrical appliances |(washing machines, refrigerator , vacuum cleaner) and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

overall uses of refrigerator rose up speedily and uses of washing machine is maintain its climbed up little bit and the vacuum cleaner uses rise up into starting but after that its same for long years

Into 1920, refrigerator uses per week or hour is 0 precent but after 1-2 years its climbed up and reached on 90 prcentile into 1960 and then till 2019 its 100 precent .

In starting year washing machine is currently on preportion 40 and till end of the 2019 its come on almost 75 prcentile . Uses of vacuum cleaner reached on top so quickly into starting its 30 precent and then years after years its come on same level as refrigerator till 2019.

in the year 19

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the charts but fails to address all parts of the task. While it mentions the appliances, it completely ignores the second chart regarding the 'amount of time spent doing housework,' which is a key component of the prompt. The overview provided is vague and contains inaccurate descriptions of the trends (e.g., claiming the vacuum cleaner remained the same for long years, which contradicts the data). The data reporting is also imprecise, often using non-standard terminology like '90 prcentile' instead of '90%'. To improve, you must ensure all data sets provided in the prompt are analyzed and that you use accurate, objective language to describe trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the awkward transition 'Into 1920' and the repetitive use of 'in starting' and 'till 2019'. The final sentence is incomplete, ending abruptly at 'in the year 19', which significantly disrupts the flow and coherence of the response. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently,' 'meanwhile,' 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There is frequent misuse of terms, such as 'prcentile' instead of 'percent' and 'preportion' instead of 'proportion'. The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'rose up speedily' or 'climbed up little bit'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision, relying on basic and repetitive words. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing trends, such as 'a steady increase,' 'a sharp rise,' or 'remained constant,' and pay closer attention to correct spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the given charts shows'), incorrect preposition usage, and tense inconsistencies. Sentence structures are simple and often poorly constructed, such as 'uses of washing machine is maintain its climbed up little bit'. Punctuation is also problematic, with irregular spacing and capitalization. The lack of complex sentence structures limits the grammatical range. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of tenses before attempting more complex structures.

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