Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This graphical representation shows changes in ownership of electrical appliances with the passage of time. From year 1920 till year 2019, people have been more advanced with time and with the development in technology, their electrical appliances for doing household work have been changed and there is also a decline in duration of time spent on the appliances.
Initially, in 1920 people were using electrical appliances with less scientific features, that made them spent more time on them. By the year of 1940, science invented some nre appliances with better and advanced features. As people were spending around 50 hours per week in 1920, that hour duration was reduced to upto 30 hours per week by the year 1940. From tenure of 1960 to 1980, people were exposed to refrigerators and to vacuum cleaners around 2000s.
It showed that in 2000s from 2000 to 2019, number of hours per week has been reduced to almost 10 hoirs per week, making people doing less work as machinery nowadays is advanced.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to adequately report the main features of the data. While it mentions the general trend of appliance ownership and housework time, it lacks specific data points from the charts. The description is vague, using phrases like 'around 2000s' instead of referencing the specific percentages or trends shown for individual appliances (e.g., vacuum cleaners, washing machines, refrigerators). The analysis is superficial and does not make meaningful comparisons between the two sets of data provided. To improve, you must select key data points and describe the trends with precision, ensuring all parts of the prompt are addressed with supporting evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into three short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as 'Initially' and 'From tenure of'. The connection between the two charts is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the relationship between appliance ownership and the reduction in housework time. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical flow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'advanced', 'changed', and 'work'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'science invented some nre appliances' (typo and awkward phrasing) and 'From tenure of 1960 to 1980'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a significant increase', or 'a downward trend'. Additionally, ensure you proofread for spelling errors like 'nre' and 'hoirs'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'people have been more advanced with time', 'that made them spent more time', and 'making people doing less work'. These errors occasionally cause slight confusion for the reader. There are also issues with tense consistency and article usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Practising the correct use of passive voice for describing trends in data would also be beneficial for this type of task.
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