Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graphs illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
overall, there was a continues growth in the use of refrigerator and washing machine in the given time period. However the hours spend in the household work had decerised significantly.
In 1920 there was no use of refrigerator but within four decad 90% of the citizen were already owned the refrigerator and till 1980 hole country was using the refrigerator and it stayed constand. While in 1920 two fifth of country population were using washing machines which rose till 1960 to 70% that dropped to 65% within 20 years that recovered and around three-quarters of the citizens were using the washing machines till 2019. However vacuum cleaners was used by 30% of the households which jumped by 20% in every 2 decad till 1980. In 2000 the hole country was using the vacuum cleaner which continued till 2019.
On the other hand, 50 hours per week was spend on going housework that dropped by 15 hours countinously till 1960. From 1960 to 1980 there was a slightly decried of 5hours which stayed constand till 2000. By 2019 only 10 hours was invested in the household works.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the charts, including the trends for appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. You successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons between the categories. However, the report contains some inaccuracies in data interpretation, such as stating that 'the whole country' was using refrigerators by 1980, whereas the graph shows a plateau at 100%. Additionally, the description of the washing machine trend is slightly confusing regarding the specific percentages and timeframes. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited with greater precision and that the overview clearly synthesizes the relationship between the rise in appliances and the decrease in housework time.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific data sets. You use some cohesive devices like 'However', 'On the other hand', and 'While' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. For instance, the transition between the appliance data and the housework data is functional but could be more sophisticated. The use of referencing is generally clear, but some sentences feel slightly disjointed due to repetitive sentence structures. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'ownership', 'households', 'significantly', and 'invested'. However, there are several spelling errors ('continues' instead of 'continuous', 'decerised' instead of 'decreased', 'hole' instead of 'whole', 'constand' instead of 'constant') and word choice issues that detract from the quality of the writing. While the meaning remains clear, these errors are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on mastering the spelling of common academic terms and using more precise collocations to describe trends, such as 'upward trajectory' or 'sharp decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('vacuum cleaners was used', '90% of the citizen were already owned') and article usage. There are also issues with tense consistency and preposition usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. To achieve a higher band, you need to focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that tenses are used consistently when describing historical data.
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