Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The rendered line graphs illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, the percentage of household with electrical appliance shown the upward trend, where the refrigerator pass through the washing machine and vacuum cleaner and reached its peak point. Besides, the number of hours of housework represented the downward trend in the given period of time.

Firstly, the percentage of refrigerator was zero in the initial year, 1920. After 40 years it had been increased significantly and reached its highest point, while it remined stable in the end of the period. Thereafter, in the 1920 the proportion of the washing machine was 30 % , which climbed in the next 4 decades and went up 70%. There was fluctuation in the ratio electical appliances during the 1980 and 2000, but it increased in the 2019.Afterward , the percenrage of the vacuum cleaner was at 40 % in the 1920 and it increased signifi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the main trends, but it is incomplete as the text cuts off abruptly mid-sentence. While you identify the upward trend for appliances and the downward trend for housework, the analysis lacks sufficient detail and fails to cover the entire period or all data points effectively. The comparison between the appliances is attempted, but the lack of a conclusion and the unfinished nature of the report prevent a full development of the task. To improve, ensure you provide a complete overview and support all main features with accurate data from the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall,' 'Firstly,' and 'Thereafter.' However, the flow is hindered by the unfinished nature of the text. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'the ratio electical appliances,' which lacks a clear antecedent or specific focus. The progression of ideas is logical at the start, but the sudden end of the response disrupts the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'upward trend,' 'downward trend,' and 'proportion.' However, there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'electical,' 'percenrage,' and 'remined.' Additionally, some phrasing is slightly unnatural, such as 'the refrigerator pass through the washing machine.' To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and more precise collocations when describing statistical changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('the percentage of household'), incorrect verb forms ('had been increased'), and punctuation issues. Subject-verb agreement is also inconsistent, such as 'the percentage of household... shown the upward trend.' While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage.

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