Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph tracks the information of how many changes in ownership of electrical cables and how much amount of time utilize people their in house work in one major country in between 1920 to 2019.
Overall, electrical appliances in washing machine were increased and decreased every year. Whereas, home appliances in refrigerator inclined every year. In contrast, vacuum cleaner rised significantly every year.
To start with the home appliances in washing machine 40% in year 1920 increased till 1960 with 70% while, showed minimally declined in year 1980 nearby 60% but started again increased and in 2019 remained stable at 72%. Furthermore, electrical appliances in refrigerator started with 0 in 1920 but inclined in every year in 1960 approximately 90% and in year 1980 at 100% stabilized till 2019. Moreover household equipment in vacuum cleaner begin with 30% in 1920 and climbed with 90% in 1960 however remained the same at 100% in between 2000 to 2019.
The amount of hours in works 50% started in 1920 and decreased every year till 2019 with 10%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for the three appliances and the housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the relationship between the variables. While the data points are generally accurate, the description of the trends is repetitive, and the summary of the housework hours is very brief. To reach a higher band, you should focus on synthesizing the information rather than just listing data points, and ensure that the 'overall' paragraph provides a more insightful summary of the main trends rather than just stating that things increased or decreased.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'To start with', 'Furthermore', 'Moreover'). There are also issues with referencing and flow; for instance, the transition between the appliances and the housework hours is abrupt. The logical progression within paragraphs is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'electrical appliances in washing machine', which makes the connection between the subject and the data less clear. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would improve the score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely heavily on basic verbs like 'increased', 'decreased', and 'rised' (note: 'rose' is the correct past tense). There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'electrical cables' instead of 'electrical appliances' and 'amount of time utilize people their in house work'. These errors occasionally impede the flow of information. To improve, try to use a wider range of synonyms for trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'plateaued', or 'declined steadily', and ensure you are using the correct terminology for the items described.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. Issues include incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'rised' instead of 'rose'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'the amount of hours in works 50% started'). The misuse of prepositions and word order often makes the sentences sound unnatural. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of tense for historical data will be beneficial.
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