Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph elucidates the percentage of household works over the period of time bertween 1920 and 2019 in one country.
Overall, the usage of all types of electrical appliances for household works increased during the entire time period.
Firstly, in 1920, the usage of Washing machines were at 40% which moved upward to 70% by 1960. Then, in 1980, it was declined to 65%, but after some time period it again grew upto 75% by 2019. It was the least used among all other electrical appliances.
In addition, usage of Refrigators in 1920 were equal to 0%, which drastically jumped to 90% in 1960 ,and after 20% years it continued to increase by 100% by 2000 and continued to 100% till 2019.
Moreover, Vaccum cleaners were used by 30% of population in 1920 which also showed suprising movement to 100% by 2000 and remained most used electrical appliance till the end of the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends for the three appliances. However, the task instructions also mention the 'amount of time spent doing housework,' which is completely omitted from your report. This is a significant omission that prevents a higher score. While you have selected key data points, such as the 1920 starting points and the 2019 end points, the failure to address the second part of the prompt means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you read the prompt thoroughly to identify all data sets provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs for each appliance. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' and 'Moreover' to transition between ideas. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally repetitive. The overview is clear, but the connection between the paragraphs could be smoother. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the relationship between the different data points is more explicitly stated rather than just listing them chronologically.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'elucidates,' 'drastically jumped,' and 'upward.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling, such as 'Refrigators' (refrigerators) and 'Vaccum' (vacuum). Additionally, the phrase 'after 20% years' is an awkward collocation. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main trends, the errors in spelling and word formation are noticeable. Focusing on accurate spelling and using more precise collocations for describing trends will help improve your score in this area.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, subject-verb agreement issues are common, such as 'usage of Washing machines were' (should be 'was') and 'it was declined' (should be 'it declined'). There are also errors with prepositions and articles, such as 'over the period of time bertween' and 'most used electrical appliance' (missing 'the'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency of the writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will lead to significant improvement.
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