Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the percentage of three different electrical appliances in a normal household between 1920 and 2019.Moreover, Another graph is demonstrating the number of hours served in a household while per week using these three machines.
Overall,Regrigerator proves to be a the most valuabel house appliance between the period of 1920 till 2019 with 0 percent usage in 1920 it shows a continous growth and 90 percent houses had Refigerator untill 1980 while this data goes up to 100% by 2019.Vacumm cleaner started its journey with 30% in 1920 and shows gradual growth.70% homes acquired Vaccum cleaner in the year 1960 and by the year 2019 almost every household had this device.Washing machine remains least usable device though 40% homes had machine in1920 but percentage shows ups and downs like 70% homes kept it in th year 1960 but then the percentage decreases dramatically for 20 years and after 1980 it increased to more then 60% untill 2019.
Additonaly, Number of hours per week goes down year by year constantly with 50 hours per week in 1920 to 20 hours per week in 1960.by 2019 it shrank down to 10 hours by week.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the trends for appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesising information effectively. The overview is present but lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends, such as the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and time spent on housework. Some data points are slightly inaccurate or confusingly phrased, such as the claim that the washing machine had 40% ownership in 1920, which is not clearly supported by the provided visual data. To improve, focus on grouping trends and highlighting key comparisons rather than listing every percentage point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which is a logical structure for this task. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or missing. For example, the transition between the two graphs is abrupt, and the use of 'Moreover, Another graph' is grammatically awkward. Paragraphing is used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied linking words. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas could be smoother if more sophisticated transition signals were employed to connect the trends in appliance ownership with the reduction in housework time.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'Regrigerator', 'valuabel', 'Vacumm', 'Vaccum', and 'Additonaly'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. The student relies on basic descriptive language like 'shows growth' or 'goes down'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined steadily', or 'remained stable'. The current vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, but the spelling inaccuracies and limited range prevent a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Issues include missing articles ('a the most'), incorrect verb forms ('is demonstrating'), and punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods ('1960.by', '1920.Moreover'). There are also errors in preposition usage ('in the year 1960' vs 'in 1960'). While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation would significantly improve the clarity of the writing.
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