Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the information about the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country during the time period from 1920 to 2019.
Overall, washing machines and vacuum cleaners used by people as before 1920 according to the line graph and refrigerators were used by people after 1920 before that time, they were not familiar with that.
From 1920 to 2019, Refrigerators were mostly used by people as compared to other appliances and there are 100% of people who have refrigerators at their homes. After that washing machine takes the second position after refrigerator and percentage of householding of washing machine increased continuously from 1920 to 2019 and in 2019 there was not any person who had not washing machine at their home. At last, the percentage of household of vacuum clearing is fluctuating and in 2019 there are 75% of people who have vacuum cleaner at their home.
Another line graph illustrates the number of hours of housework per week with those appliances in between the time period from 1920 to 2019. In 1920, number of hours per week were 50 but it showed reduction in it at the time going on and in 2019 it became 10.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the trends for the three appliances and the decline in housework hours, the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that 'in 2019 there was not any person who had not washing machine,' which is an over-generalization. Additionally, the description of the vacuum cleaner trend as 'fluctuating' is vague. To improve, focus on selecting key data points (start, end, and significant changes) and describing them with greater precision rather than attempting to describe every minor movement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'in 1920' and 'in 2019' to start sentences. The transition between the two charts is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'consequently,' 'in contrast,' 'furthermore') to connect ideas more fluidly. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the information presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'householding of washing machine' and 'vacuum clearing.' You rely on basic descriptors like 'used by people' and 'takes the second position.' To achieve a higher score, incorporate more academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'ownership rates,' 'steadily increased,' 'witnessed a decline,' and 'fluctuated significantly.' Focus on using collocations correctly to ensure your writing sounds more natural and professional.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include missing articles ('the' washing machine), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'before that time, they were not familiar with that'). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage also need attention. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic errors and practice using more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, to describe the data more accurately and concisely.
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