Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the changing trend of electrical products purchased by households and the number of hours per week spent on these house work between the period of 1920 to 2019.
Overaal, the percentage of households buying electrical appliances have been constantly increasing over the period given. Refrigerator was the appliance,which was highly owned by house holds , while washing machine was least product owned by individuals. The number of hours per week per households has declined over the period given.
The percentage of households with a washing machine and refrigerator significantly rose in 1980 with 100 percent of households and remained stable between 2000 and 2019. Likewise, the percentage of the population with a washing machine fluctuated, reached its peak at 70 per cent in 1960 before declining in 1980, then rose up to around 72 per cent.
on the other hand, the number of hours of house work spent significantly declined from 50% in 1920 to 10% in 2019
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the general trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and contains inaccuracies. For instance, stating that washing machine ownership reached 100% in 1980 contradicts the visual data, and the claim that housework hours were '50%' in 1920 is a misinterpretation of the unit (hours vs. percentages). While the overview is present, the lack of precision in data extraction and the misreading of the graph's axes prevent a higher score. The response would benefit from more careful attention to the specific figures provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas from the general trends to specific details. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'on the other hand' is used to introduce the housework data, but it does not effectively contrast with the previous paragraph's content. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect the data points more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'house work' (should be one word) and 'highly owned by house holds'. The student relies on basic descriptors like 'increasing' and 'declined'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of minor errors in word choice and collocation limit the score. To improve, the student should focus on using more varied synonyms for trends and more precise terminology for data reporting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('percentage... have been', 'Refrigerator was the appliance,which was'), punctuation errors (missing spaces after commas), and incorrect article usage. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. The student should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly regarding pluralisation and the correct use of articles, to ensure a more professional and error-free presentation.
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