Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph shows the percentage of households with electrical appliances and number of hours of housework per week households from 1920 - 2019
overall, it is evident that proportions of households with electrical appliances showed a increasing trend. washing Refrigerator and and Vacuum cleaner showed a sharp increase, whereas gradual increase was shown in other appliance.
In detail, In 1920 showed a skyrocketed trend from 20 percent to 90 and remains steady throughout the period by reaching at 100. whereas, washing machine significants significantly increase from 1920 to 1960 by 20 percent and fluctuations was seen from 1960 to 2000, upsurged nearly 63 percent over the period. Moreover sharp vacuum cleaner climbed over the period and reached to 100 at at the end.
Moving towards the electricity according to the number of hours used for households work showed a decreasing trend by 40 over the period from 1920 to 1960, while remain steady over the period till 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is often unclear or inaccurate. For example, the description of the refrigerator trend as 'skyrocketed' from 20% to 90% is confusingly phrased, and the data interpretation regarding the washing machine and vacuum cleaner lacks precision. While you identify the overall trends, the lack of clarity in reporting specific figures makes it difficult for the reader to follow the data. To improve, ensure that you clearly distinguish between the different appliances and use accurate terminology to describe the trends, such as 'a steady climb' or 'a significant rise', rather than mixing terms like 'skyrocketed' and 'fluctuations' without clear evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'over the period'. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. For instance, the transition to the second paragraph is weak, and the final paragraph regarding electricity usage is confusingly introduced. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'significants significantly increase' and 'upsurged', which are not standard collocations. The repetition of basic terms like 'increase' and 'period' limits the sophistication of the response. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision in vocabulary prevents a higher score. You should aim to use more precise verbs and nouns to describe data, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'a gradual decline', and ensure that you check for basic spelling and word-form errors before finalising your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'proportions... showed a increasing trend'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'significants significantly'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'In 1920 showed a skyrocketed trend'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and unnecessary capitalisation. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like article usage and verb tense consistency.
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