Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates about the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households
per week in one country during 1920 to 2019.
My first viewpoint is that in the year 1920 the number of wahing machines was 40% meanwhile the refrigerator had a sum of 0%. The total hours of washing machine in a housework was 50 hours per week , while the refrigerator had not been used during that period. the refrigerator had a rapid growth in the year 1960 which had a total of 90%, while the vacuum cleaner had also raised upto 70%, whereas the washing machine had a total quanity of 70%, but the total hours of housework per week and per household was 20 hours which declined 30% from the year 1920.
During the year of 1980 the washing machine had a percentage of 62% while the refrigerator and the vacuum cleaner had a percentage of 100% and 90% which had a total housework hours was 15% . In the year 2019 the refrigerator and the vacuum cleaner had a total of 100% but the washing machine had a sum of 75% during that year. The total housework per household had a sum of 11hours per week.
To conclude: the refrigerator and the vacuum cleaner had an ownership which reached to 100% by the end of the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the reporting is inconsistent. For instance, the student describes the 1920 data for washing machines as 40%, which is inaccurate based on the provided graph. Additionally, the description of the data is somewhat mechanical, listing figures without always providing a clear synthesis or comparison. The conclusion is brief and does not fully capture the overall trend of the relationship between appliance ownership and time saved. To reach a higher band, ensure data accuracy and focus on highlighting the most significant trends rather than listing every data point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and awkward transitions. Phrases like 'My first viewpoint is that' are inappropriate for an academic report. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'meanwhile', 'whereas', and 'during the year of', they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. Improving the use of linking words and varying sentence structure would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. The student relies on repetitive phrases such as 'had a total of', 'had a sum of', and 'had a percentage of'. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'total quanity' instead of 'percentage' or 'proportion', and 'total hours of washing machine in a housework', which is unnatural. To improve, the student should use a wider range of verbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and avoid repeating the same sentence patterns.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('illustrates about'), subject-verb agreement errors, and awkward phrasing ('the refrigerator had a rapid growth in the year 1960'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing and capitalization. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would be beneficial.
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