Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph below, illustrates the information about the ownership of electronic gadgets, and the quantity of time spent during their house work in a country, from the year 1920 to 2019.
Overall, the visual data depicts that the ownership of appliances increased significantly over the period, while the number of hours spent on housework decreased considerably.
To start with the term, Washing machine in 1920 it was 0% and within the time it begins fluctuating and goes up to 50% in the year 1940. After 1940, there was a sudden rose in the trend and usage of this gadget goes to his peak point in the year 1980 leading with 100.Furthermore, in terms of Refrigerator, as in 1940 it is witnessed with 40% and starts fluctuating till the year 1960 and got a minor drop in 1980. Lastly, since the year 1920 vacuum cleaner holding gave top notch performance from the starting year till the end of the time period shown with 100%
Conversely, number of work starts to decrease from the starting, which was 50 hours in starting and decreases up to 10hours per week till the year 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the trends for appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the washing machine trend is slightly inaccurate regarding the timeline, and the data points for the refrigerator are not clearly linked to the provided visual information. While the overall trend is identified, the comparison between the two charts—specifically how the rise in appliances correlates with the reduction in housework time—is missing. To reach a higher band, you should focus on synthesising the data rather than just listing individual trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'To start with', and 'Conversely'. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'To start with the term, Washing machine'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Improving the use of linking phrases to connect the two different datasets would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks precision and variety. Phrases like 'top notch performance' are informal and inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'sudden rose' (should be 'sudden rise') and 'electronic gadgets' (the prompt specifies 'electrical appliances'). To improve, focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'peaked at', 'fluctuated', or 'a significant decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the line graph below, illustrates' (unnecessary comma), 'within the time it begins fluctuating' (tense inconsistency), and 'number of work starts to decrease' (article usage). While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing historical data.
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