Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This chart show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
As from the chart we have seen there is a data of three different electrical appliances i.e Washing machine, refrigerator and a vacuum cleaner. As the data shows that the use of different electrical appliances nowadays increasing as the technology is increasing. Back in 1920 there is no refrigerator in any of the house and like wise the washing machine and vacuum cleaner.
As from the chart we have seen there is a data of three different electrical appliances i.e Washing machine, refrigerator and a vacuum cleaner. As the data shows that the use of different electrical appliances nowadays increasing as the technology is increasing. Back in 1920 there is no refrigerator in any of the house and like wise the washing machine and vacuum cleaner.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the task requirements adequately. While it mentions the three appliances, it completely ignores the second part of the prompt regarding the 'amount of time spent doing housework.' Furthermore, the response is highly repetitive, as the entire second paragraph is a verbatim copy of the first. There is no attempt to report main features or make meaningful comparisons between the data points. The analysis is superficial and lacks the necessary detail to reach a higher band. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are covered and avoid repeating information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks logical progression and structure. The most significant issue is the repetition of the entire second paragraph, which makes the essay feel disjointed and circular. There is no clear paragraphing strategy, and the use of cohesive devices is extremely limited and mechanical (e.g., 'As from the chart'). The lack of a clear overview or logical grouping of data points makes the response difficult to follow. To improve, you should organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs—one for an overview and others for specific data comparisons—and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'there is a data' and 'as the technology is increasing' are imprecise and grammatically awkward. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data effectively. You rely on simple, everyday language rather than the academic terminology required for Task 1, such as 'fluctuate,' 'peak,' 'decline,' or 'significant proportion.' To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to trends and data analysis, and avoid using the same words repeatedly within the same paragraph.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that hinder clarity. Examples include 'This chart show' (subject-verb agreement), 'As from the chart we have seen there is a data' (awkward phrasing and incorrect article usage), and 'like wise' (spelling error). The sentence structures are simple and often repetitive, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. There is a lack of control over basic tenses and sentence construction. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and practicing more complex sentence structures like passive voice or subordinate clauses to describe the data.
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