Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart describe the ownership of electric appliances and the time spend on their usage between 1920 to 2019. The usage of refrigerator is about 0%. After 1920 Its use increases and people start using It mostly and in1980 its usage is very high compared to others appliances . Vacuum cleaner is the second highest usage appliance in 1920. The highest usage appliance is washing machine in1920 and It becomes similar to vacuum in 1960. In 2019 washing machine becomes the least usage household product and its percentage is 75% . The refrigerator and vacuum cleaner are at the same usage amount between 2000 to 2019. The number of hours per week of housework is high in 1920 but they decreases rapidly. They become the least usage in
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the task is incomplete, as the final sentence is cut off mid-thought. While you have identified some key features, such as the trends for refrigerators and washing machines, the analysis is superficial. You have not provided a clear overview of the main trends, and the data reporting is inconsistent, with some figures being inaccurate (e.g., stating the washing machine is the least used in 2019 when it is actually the most used). To improve, ensure you cover all data points, provide a clear summary, and meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks logical paragraphing, consisting of a single, underdeveloped block of text. Cohesive devices are largely absent, making the flow of information mechanical and disjointed. For example, the transition between the description of appliances and the housework hours is abrupt and lacks a linking phrase. The referencing is also unclear; the use of 'they' in the final sentence is ambiguous as it does not clearly refer back to the 'number of hours'. To improve, organize your response into clear paragraphs (Introduction, Overview, and Body Paragraphs) and use a wider range of cohesive devices to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'usage' and 'appliance'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the chart describe' (should be 'describes') and 'least usage household product'. The range is insufficient to convey the data with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'plateau', 'dramatic decline', or 'significant growth', and ensure correct word forms are used throughout your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the clarity of the message. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The chart describe', 'they decreases'), incorrect preposition usage ('between 1920 to 2019' should be 'between 1920 and 2019'), and punctuation errors. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with little evidence of the complex structures required for higher bands. The incomplete final sentence also demonstrates a lack of control over sentence construction. Focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and expanding your sentence variety by using complex structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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