Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided chart illustrates the proportion of household with electrical appliances: washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner ownership between 1920 and 2019 while the other graph denotes the number of hours spent on housework in a week.

Overall, electrical appliances had gained popularity over the period and hence experienced a significant growth in ownership. Contrarily, there is a notable downward trend in the number of hours of housework per week.

Washing machine held the highest position as the most owned appliance in 1920 with about 40%. In the following years it rose gradually to 60% in 1960 and experienced a marginal downfall. Later showed an upward trend recorded to approximately 62%. Among the three appliances, vacuum cleaner was the least owned in 1920 but it showcased a rapid sore with 100% ownership and remained the same with no fluctuation till 2019.

In the beginning, there were no houses with refrigerator. However it suffered a notable upward trend, ultimately showing that every house own a refrigerator by the end of 2000.

It is evident from the graph that the number of housework experienced a dramatic downfall to about 10%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview. However, the response is incomplete. You failed to describe the data for the 'hours spent on housework' in any meaningful detail, merely stating it experienced a 'dramatic downfall to about 10%'. The graph shows a clear decline from 50 hours to 10 hours, which is a crucial comparison. Furthermore, the description of the appliance data contains some inaccuracies regarding the timeline and percentages (e.g., stating the vacuum cleaner reached 100% in 1920, which is not supported by the chart). To improve, ensure you report data points accurately and provide a balanced summary of all trends presented in the visual information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'Contrarily', and 'In the beginning' to link ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is sometimes disjointed. For instance, the transition between the washing machine and the vacuum cleaner is abrupt. Additionally, the final sentence is isolated and lacks a proper concluding thought or connection to the previous data. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would improve the flow and logical progression of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'notable downward trend', and 'marginal downfall'. However, there are some awkward word choices and inaccuracies, such as 'rapid sore' (likely meant 'rise') and 'every house own a refrigerator' (should be 'owned'). These errors occasionally hinder the precision of your reporting. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary is used accurately in context. Avoid informal phrasing and ensure that your terminology matches the data trends you are describing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. Examples include 'proportion of household' (should be 'households'), 'the number of housework' (should be 'hours of housework'), and 'every house own' (should be 'owned'). There are also issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent tense usage when describing past trends, and pluralisation to improve your accuracy.

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