Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts below illustrates the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing homework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall, the most significant growth could be seen in refrigerator staring from zero in 1920 and reach at 90 percentage in 1960 whereas, vacuum cleaner showed fluctuation in years from 1960 to 2000.
Refrigerator is the only electrical appliance that demonstrate the rapidly grew. In 1920 , it is on zero percentage after 60 years it reached 100 percentage ownership. In addition, the ownership of vacuum cleaner is 30 percentage in 1920, this electrical appliance are grew with 20 percentage each year and reached 100 percentage in 2000 and remained at same position for the last 19 years. Moreover, washing machine ownership showed a mild fluctuation from 1960 to 2000. This is the lowest category that people are less interested in buying it started from 40 percentage in 1920 and reached at almost 70 percentage in 2019.
The number of housework per year drastically decrease from 50 hours to 20 hours in 1920 to 1960. In 1980 to 2000 it remained stabled in between 10 hours to 20 hours.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main trends, but there are significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, you state the refrigerator reached 100% in 60 years, whereas the chart shows it reaching 100% by 1980 (60 years from 1920). Furthermore, you describe the vacuum cleaner as growing by 20% each year, which is mathematically incorrect based on the provided data. The description of housework hours is also vague. To improve, ensure you carefully cross-reference the years and percentages on the axes. While you identify the main features, the lack of precision in reporting the data prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by inaccurate data reporting and some awkward transitions. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition' and 'Moreover', but they are sometimes used to connect ideas that are factually inconsistent. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as when you refer to 'this electrical appliance' without clearly distinguishing which one you are focusing on in that specific sentence. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that the data supports the claims will enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'growth', 'reached', and 'percentage'. There are also errors in word choice and form, such as 'staring' instead of 'starting', 'demonstrate' instead of 'demonstrated', and 'remained stabled' instead of 'remained stable'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'soared', 'fluctuated', or 'a gradual decline', and ensure correct word forms are used throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The charts below illustrates'), incorrect tense usage ('this electrical appliance are grew'), and awkward phrasing ('The number of housework per year drastically decrease'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent tense usage when describing historical data. Proofreading for these fundamental errors will significantly improve your score.
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