Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graphs ellborate the how to usage of electice appliaces follow the differnt pattern and 2 nd graph shows total number of work hours in particular week in per household. Between year 1920 to 2019.
Firstly,it can be show how demands were change in electric appliances in year between 1920 to 2019. The ownership in Refrigertor were stayed constant in 1920 to 1940 which was around 55%. After two decades the need of Refrigerator slightly high by 35% which was markable growth. moreover after 1960 the sells in Refrigerator rose by 10% during 1980. from 1980 to 2000 sells stayed constant. The sells in Vacuum cleaner always ranked at top in every year and it was rose by 20% in every year and between 2000 to 2019 sells cross 100%. The ownership in Washing machine was flacuated everytime sometimes demand of it can rose and sometime it decesred.
Moreover, it can be shown from graph that ,the number of hours people spending in housework can dramatically went down. In year 1920 people spent their 50 hours to do work per week but the coin fliped after 1920 the spending hours in work were went down almost 20 %. again 20% in 1960 and stayed constant after 1980.
To sum up, the graphs data shows how the technologies can reduced human work . And it helps to save our time as well.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the claim that refrigerator ownership was constant between 1920 and 1940 is not supported by the visual data, and the description of the vacuum cleaner trend is imprecise. The overview is weak, as it does not clearly synthesize the relationship between the two charts. To improve, focus on accurately reporting the data points and providing a more cohesive summary of the overall trends rather than listing individual fluctuations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'the coin fliped' and 'moreover after 1960'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between appliances is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which appliance is being discussed. To reach a higher band, use a wider range of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'ellborate', 'electice', 'sells' (used instead of 'sales'), and 'flacuated'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express the trends with precision; for example, using 'high' as a verb or 'markable' instead of 'remarkable' or 'significant'. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and practice using collocations appropriate for describing data, such as 'experienced a steady increase' or 'remained relatively stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('demands were change'), subject-verb agreement ('sells... rose'), and awkward phrasing ('the usage of electice appliaces follow the differnt pattern'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.
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